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Well, I've just spent the last couple days reading your little gem here, and yes, I rubbed more than a couple out over like Chp 3, 5- well, you can guess it was a few. So, in truth, 14 chps, and 15 being an epilogue. I can follow the whole concept, but it could have been fleshed out more in many places, no pun intended. Even presenting Suki as you did throughout 6 and 7, I knew she'd kill somebody down the road, just thought it would be Aang or Sokka, or maybe Zuko, and heres why; Because they're males?! Suki's pleasures had always BEEN sapphic (Females only)... til Azula got a hold of her and used a big stone dick in her pussy! And with realizing just what kind of weapon she could be molded into, I'd figure the Fire bitch would ready her new toy to attack on command. Killing Katara just seemed like such a waste. Toph was dialed in and ready to kill a lover she just fucked that morning???, Shes just waiting for Suki to do something?, of which seemed wrong in its characterization. I thought sure, squish her, burn her, freeze her... then shatter into a million pieces, all of these instead coming from the AVATAR. Katara kills Zuko, fine, but his last word was for the one `humanizing` love he finally had. He Fights For the Fire Nation, but is unwilling to accept his nation is in the wrong? Again characterizations are very 'off' in spots. Other than Sokka/Ty Lee in 7, Ty Lee is mentioned, but doesn't even show up for anything story-wise. I could see a couple remarks about her showing up in 15; that didn't happen. It just occurred to me; have it found in 15 that Mai was pregnant, so she (and us, the readers) could give back to the world a life to balance out all those horribly taken. Didn't happen. So, make it Ty Lee??? The Epilogue. Fire Lord Iroh... fits. He names a successor, and we have Fire Lord Mai... and it fits, dear writer. So, so Very Sad, was her existence. Really, nothing of note from either the Earth Kingdom or the Water Tribes? And finally, Sokka and Toph. Glad you let them be together, but just 2 kids??? And no mention of sex??!!?? Having That talk with Kataang and Poppy could have been Very funny. They're 10 or 11, having taken out a skiff to check some nearby shrimp traps (because DAD said `I'm tired, you kids get some extra chores to help me out today`), and with Po being a Waterbender, yeah, you all see how the job gets done a Whole lot faster. Didn't help that a little wind blew up, too. So they hit the shore, tie up the boat, and race for the house... all under the patter of heavy raindrops. But they hear something? screaming?!?!? Into the house they go, dripping wet, to find Mom on her hands and knees howling in front of the fireplace, and Dad right behind her barking orders as he squeezes her hips. Both quite naked. Oppps. It could have used a decent beta-ing, too, what with Alot of gaffes overall, but it does read good. No, Well. You had a vision, it just hurt when I got to the end. Thank you for this.

Wow...dark ending man...still i enjoyed the ride.

Well, congratulations. You've written the first fapfic to ever make me cry.
Aside from the ending, EPIC and AMAZING are the only words I can put for this.

...That said, do you think we could get an "I Am Legend"-style alternate, happier ending? Because, well... FUCK.

this was a great story i cant wait to read your next story

This new chapter was something of a novel experience.

I'm quite intrigued at the new direction this may take. Count it as one person willing to support you and wanting to read more!

An interesting ending to one the best stories ever.

A good story, but the ending, in all honesty, stunk. I've NEVER been a fan of the 'bad ending' to a story, and I was liking the story up until that point.

Wow... that was really unexpected... And really quite sad...

I hope you write an epliogue, I'd like to read it. This whole story was fantastic from beginning to end, even if the end was a little sadder than hoped...

You are one great writer, and I look forward to more of your stuff in the future.

I'd be interested in seeing that.

Shit, I didn't see that ending coming.

Good finale, would kind of have liked it to be more sex-filled.