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It start off bad,but it's coming a littie better.Make the chapters a littie longer and let the people speak more.And ron the alone male around for possible women.Well then after been horrible rape,ron well be the alone kim will feel comfortble with.

I am almost possible i have read this story before with a different title.. there is even a comic made by a artist that goes along with the story the person wrote, i will have to go diving.

Ok after some digging i discovered it was another comic that a story was written for, though the person who made the comic has a comic that seems to go right along with this story. Not sure if your a fan of his or if its just a coincidence(sp?) http://www.wwoec.com/artist/dtiberius/

Well first make the chapters a littie longer.But than agian who im i to talk?You should make it look bad for a moment,then turn around on the bad guys.Like ron gone all mystic monkey on there ass, more on shego likely if you know what i mean.He has a big fight with Dr.D to the end.Then he try to comfort the women the best way he can.If you want to is the women have there revegne on shego at the end.


P.S.but before all that i'm wonder what othere women you had in mind.It's not that comfortible with the rape scene,it just wonder that's all.

I might be jumping the gun and this may happen later but.........

So some how Ron,Wade,Global Justice, Mr Dr P. and the Tweebs are not going to exact revenge with Ron using Mystical Monkey power, or the others using lethal forms of technology??

There is no way a father,brother, best friends,and boyfriend, who puts her life before his will sit on the sidelines after this happens to their Girlfriend/daughter/sister Wife/Mother.

please continue it is a great story so far. hope to see more soon.

yay! I like your story so far. You did a good job on the spelling.The story Seems to flow, so far. I greatly look forward to your next chapter. Great Job!!

I'm sorry,but this sound like a comic book i once saw.But i'll see where your gone first before i say something.