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November 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I must say that this is perhaps the best chapter so far, and it does leave its fair share of questions. I am rather surprised that Corscan let herself get as injured as she did though, I also liked how you acknowledged Shego's flight capability and the inherent difficulties of flying with propulsion from your hands. I am also surprised that Corscan reacted as violently as she did towards Ron it seems that she would have seen the benefits of staying on more amicable ground with Kim's best friend, though I guess that she might have been trying to drive a wedge between them and even if that is the case it seems to be a rather overly blunt way of doing it, there would be so many more effective ways of doing it. I know she was stressed and annoyed, but it still seemed a little out of character. Anyway, I loved chapter 27, so keep up the good work.
Herald
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November 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Another intense chapter! Wow! What a fight! Those were some clever techniques that Shego used, especially the one she used to escape.
The confrontation between Ron and Corscan started out how I expected, but the part of Corscan going hostile and putting him in a one-handed chokehold was unexpected. Let's just hope Kim never gets word of this little incident.
And now, Shego's preparing herself for a rematch! Looking forward to that!
The confrontation between Ron and Corscan started out how I expected, but the part of Corscan going hostile and putting him in a one-handed chokehold was unexpected. Let's just hope Kim never gets word of this little incident.
And now, Shego's preparing herself for a rematch! Looking forward to that!
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November 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I. Hate. Corscan.
Warning: I'm gonna vent.
Despite your claims to the contrary, she is most definitely EVIL... but also INVINCIBLE, ALL-POWERFUL, DECEITFUL, CONTROLLING, NEARLY ALL-KNOWING! Does she have any weakness? Are any stronger or able to beat, best, or better her? You've done well to create a character I loathe with every ounce of my being; whom I wish a long and protracted, painful death/torture upon. But does she have any flaws beyond hubris and great denial: "I do not now, nor do I ever want to hurt Kim. I only want the best for her, understand?" -Funny, most people don't show that by nearly killing their sex-toy's oldest/closest friend, regardless of how one rationalizes her use of excessive/lethal force; or tricking said sex-toy into gambling away her virginity. Mental Health Professionals call that sociopathic... and I truly doubt Kim won't end up "hurt" once the curtain falls). But, I doubt that it will happen. So far, Corscan gets away with everything (more proof of her "God-hood"); doubt that trend will change.
Part of me thinks you're takin' a piss, mostly as her grand role in the greater conflict has yet to be revealed. Indeed, I can't fathom what said conflict will be based upon or how roles will be filled, based by the summary you gave in the forward. You've done well to reveal Kim's sexuality (in the most unorthodox manner that I've encountered), but without a small sense of frame or greater purpose, it all feels aimless now.
The second half of me thinks Corscan is a means of torture for KiGo fans. And while I "wish I could quit you," out of hair pulling frustration muddled with rage dashed liberally with hatred for the She-Hulk (she REALLY pushes my buttons, as if you couldn't tell), I can't. With the same grim, rubbernecking fascination people have for car crashes, I find I am unable to turn away. So, whom do I hate more, Her or Me?
I will say this: Revelations of Destiny is unlike any KP fanfiction I've read. You've shown yourself to be a remarkable writer with great imagination.
Now, however, I need to burn off some adrenaline and more than a little rage, so it's off to the heavy bag and the Dojo.
Warning: I'm gonna vent.
Despite your claims to the contrary, she is most definitely EVIL... but also INVINCIBLE, ALL-POWERFUL, DECEITFUL, CONTROLLING, NEARLY ALL-KNOWING! Does she have any weakness? Are any stronger or able to beat, best, or better her? You've done well to create a character I loathe with every ounce of my being; whom I wish a long and protracted, painful death/torture upon. But does she have any flaws beyond hubris and great denial: "I do not now, nor do I ever want to hurt Kim. I only want the best for her, understand?" -Funny, most people don't show that by nearly killing their sex-toy's oldest/closest friend, regardless of how one rationalizes her use of excessive/lethal force; or tricking said sex-toy into gambling away her virginity. Mental Health Professionals call that sociopathic... and I truly doubt Kim won't end up "hurt" once the curtain falls). But, I doubt that it will happen. So far, Corscan gets away with everything (more proof of her "God-hood"); doubt that trend will change.
Part of me thinks you're takin' a piss, mostly as her grand role in the greater conflict has yet to be revealed. Indeed, I can't fathom what said conflict will be based upon or how roles will be filled, based by the summary you gave in the forward. You've done well to reveal Kim's sexuality (in the most unorthodox manner that I've encountered), but without a small sense of frame or greater purpose, it all feels aimless now.
The second half of me thinks Corscan is a means of torture for KiGo fans. And while I "wish I could quit you," out of hair pulling frustration muddled with rage dashed liberally with hatred for the She-Hulk (she REALLY pushes my buttons, as if you couldn't tell), I can't. With the same grim, rubbernecking fascination people have for car crashes, I find I am unable to turn away. So, whom do I hate more, Her or Me?
I will say this: Revelations of Destiny is unlike any KP fanfiction I've read. You've shown yourself to be a remarkable writer with great imagination.
Now, however, I need to burn off some adrenaline and more than a little rage, so it's off to the heavy bag and the Dojo.
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November 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Like Kim wouldn't believe Ron in that situation.
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November 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Curse you again Lord K!!! Now I like Ron! Ok, this was one of the best Ron coming to terms with Kim being gay scenes I have read. Granted you did place your story BEFORE they started dating but Ron’s feelings for Kim were still there and I really enjoyed reading his struggle. And since you know how much I despise Ron you know that’s saying something. Again, I like how you’re placing Monique in the center of everything. Kim really needs a crutch I mean friend like her. Oh, and PLEASE don’t tell me you’re gonna have the Tweebs out Kimmie!!!! I’d rather see Ron make the slip!
Still missing my Shego!!! Bring it man, bring it!
Still missing my Shego!!! Bring it man, bring it!
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October 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I thought that Ron would at least except it and he even has the same bad feeling I have about Corscan, not that I am saying she is a villein but she is pulling strings at the right time to get what she wants and mortal is not a word I would use to describe her. signed a fan Shego.
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October 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for the quick posting, always appreciated! How much is left?
Ron's not being true with his feelings is only going to blow up in his face later, badly. The same can be said of his snooping, but it will be nice to gather more dirt on that Corscan devil-woman and reveal more of the mystery. Still waiting on that Vengeance with a healthy dose of Comeuppance... Still nothing of Shego, AND DID KP TELL THOSE TWO THE FULL STORY OF NEARLY KILLING SHEGO!? I get the distinct impression that she hasn't. And why does Dr. P always play the heavy? Yes, her mother rocks (that Milfy Sex-Kitten Siren), but Papa P always plays the naive and emotionless Ward Cleaver.
So, still waiting for this Powderkeg of Deception, Deceit, and Destruction to go critical, but with multiple possible fuses:
1) Jim and Tim blow the "gay" whistle about Corscan and Kim. (These Two Can't Keep This to Themselves)
2) Shego ('nuff said). (Most Delicious of All)
3) Ron earns his salt and gets the dirt on that sapphic Tiger-Lady/Devil Woman, blowing the whistle. (Hinted At)
4) Kim FINALLY takes her head out of denial's ass, using the brains god done seen fit to give her (but hasn't used much of) (Never Gonna Happen; She's in Pocket)
5) All of the Above.
6) 1), 2), 3), 5), BUT NOT 4).
Excited for more! Waitin' patiently for SHEGO, the EXPLOSION, and "THE BIG PAYBACK!" Rev it up!
Ron's not being true with his feelings is only going to blow up in his face later, badly. The same can be said of his snooping, but it will be nice to gather more dirt on that Corscan devil-woman and reveal more of the mystery. Still waiting on that Vengeance with a healthy dose of Comeuppance... Still nothing of Shego, AND DID KP TELL THOSE TWO THE FULL STORY OF NEARLY KILLING SHEGO!? I get the distinct impression that she hasn't. And why does Dr. P always play the heavy? Yes, her mother rocks (that Milfy Sex-Kitten Siren), but Papa P always plays the naive and emotionless Ward Cleaver.
So, still waiting for this Powderkeg of Deception, Deceit, and Destruction to go critical, but with multiple possible fuses:
1) Jim and Tim blow the "gay" whistle about Corscan and Kim. (These Two Can't Keep This to Themselves)
2) Shego ('nuff said). (Most Delicious of All)
3) Ron earns his salt and gets the dirt on that sapphic Tiger-Lady/Devil Woman, blowing the whistle. (Hinted At)
4) Kim FINALLY takes her head out of denial's ass, using the brains god done seen fit to give her (but hasn't used much of) (Never Gonna Happen; She's in Pocket)
5) All of the Above.
6) 1), 2), 3), 5), BUT NOT 4).
Excited for more! Waitin' patiently for SHEGO, the EXPLOSION, and "THE BIG PAYBACK!" Rev it up!
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October 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Whew! I'm glad that Kim and Ron were able to work it out. Ron's just glad that it was Monique who knocked some sense into him. If Kim had been the one to slug him, like Shego, Ron would've had a dislocated jaw.
Now there's trouble with two captial T's. The Tweebs have overheard Ron's outburst! This cannot bode well. I know this much - if those two breathe a word of this to anyone, and Kim finds out, they will not make it to puberty.
Ron taking matters into his own hands? Oh, this I've got to see (or read)!
Another great chapter!
Now there's trouble with two captial T's. The Tweebs have overheard Ron's outburst! This cannot bode well. I know this much - if those two breathe a word of this to anyone, and Kim finds out, they will not make it to puberty.
Ron taking matters into his own hands? Oh, this I've got to see (or read)!
Another great chapter!
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October 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
25 & 26. Good chapters. Interesting developments. excellent emontional content. I look forward to more.
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October 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ron was OH SO sickeningly RON in this chapter. I just wanted to reach out through the computer and slap him. Running out of gas! Too funny. It was agonizing to have to read this chapter because I just so don’t like Ron when he is being so, well… Ronish which you captured quite well. I also liked how you handled Rufus and didn't make him just a fixture, but put him into the story. I have to feel bad for Kim and I am wondering what this is going to do to her "relationship" with Corsan since typically we like to displace our hurt/anger. I can see Kim being mad at C for her problems with Ron. Also, I would love to know just what exactly Kim left out of the explanation since her sexuality really is the least of her worries right now.