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November 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I must say I love these psychoanalysis chapters even more than some of the action chapters, because they cast a new perspective on the events that have transpired and give words to what you've been implying the entire time. You have a very good read on Kim's character, which I love because it happens to coincide with my own.
Now I see what you mean about not wanting to read any KiGo stories until you finished this, because I've seen a lot of this stuff before. However, I like your version the best simply because, despite having ALL of the evidence in front of her, Kim still can't decide what to do. It's just like in Chapter 12 where she was debating with herself over whether or not she was Gay (it's because of this story that I capitalize that word now...). You also present the facts in a fresh, logical manner that make sense within the context of the story as well as the canon to some extent. It's all well thought out, without any wishful thinking.
For instance, I like the way you presented the fact that Shego holds back, because honestly, there's NO WAY someone of Kim's skills (before Corscan started training her anyway) could have lasted against her. NO FUCKING WAY. But that doesn't make her generous. Shego expects Kim to [i]prove[/i] that she's worthy of the handicap she gives her, so that she can become good enough to one day face her on her level. If Kim can't do that... well it's her own fault for not trying.
I like how you used Monique in this chapter. Sometimes I just get this mental image of her in a leather chair, with glasses and a pinstripe suit, holding a notepad and saying, "Let's start with your mother...."
LOL
In all seriousness, though, she does strike me as the kind of person who knows how to read people. Maybe not as well as Corscan, but the girl's got an eye for these sorts of things and she makes her opinion on the situation known. Why she'd choose to be a Psychiatrist (a medical doctor who focuses mainly on pharmaceutical treatments for mental disorders) rather than a Therapist is beyond me, but may have to do with the fact that you're portraying her as a very smart cookie who wouldn't settle for anything less than an M.D., even though a PhD is often just as good. But maybe I'm reading too much into this. ;)
All in all, great chapter and I can't wait to see the inevitable (second) confrontation between Kim and Shego. :D
beeftony
Now I see what you mean about not wanting to read any KiGo stories until you finished this, because I've seen a lot of this stuff before. However, I like your version the best simply because, despite having ALL of the evidence in front of her, Kim still can't decide what to do. It's just like in Chapter 12 where she was debating with herself over whether or not she was Gay (it's because of this story that I capitalize that word now...). You also present the facts in a fresh, logical manner that make sense within the context of the story as well as the canon to some extent. It's all well thought out, without any wishful thinking.
For instance, I like the way you presented the fact that Shego holds back, because honestly, there's NO WAY someone of Kim's skills (before Corscan started training her anyway) could have lasted against her. NO FUCKING WAY. But that doesn't make her generous. Shego expects Kim to [i]prove[/i] that she's worthy of the handicap she gives her, so that she can become good enough to one day face her on her level. If Kim can't do that... well it's her own fault for not trying.
I like how you used Monique in this chapter. Sometimes I just get this mental image of her in a leather chair, with glasses and a pinstripe suit, holding a notepad and saying, "Let's start with your mother...."
LOL
In all seriousness, though, she does strike me as the kind of person who knows how to read people. Maybe not as well as Corscan, but the girl's got an eye for these sorts of things and she makes her opinion on the situation known. Why she'd choose to be a Psychiatrist (a medical doctor who focuses mainly on pharmaceutical treatments for mental disorders) rather than a Therapist is beyond me, but may have to do with the fact that you're portraying her as a very smart cookie who wouldn't settle for anything less than an M.D., even though a PhD is often just as good. But maybe I'm reading too much into this. ;)
All in all, great chapter and I can't wait to see the inevitable (second) confrontation between Kim and Shego. :D
beeftony
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November 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
29_ Good figh great ending it with a kiss.
30- Good to see more how you see Shego's mind works.
31- wonderfuly balancened chapter.
30- Good to see more how you see Shego's mind works.
31- wonderfuly balancened chapter.
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November 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Woot! Let the Kigo begin! I look forward to Kim and Shego's next encounter. I'm also very curious about the woman who confronted Corscan. Sounded like an old flame. I love Monique and Kims talks. I look forward to the next update and don't forget to bring on the KiGo! Pretty please with a cherry on top?!
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November 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Long time reader, first time reviewer (because I simply can't take it anymore):
Hey Hollywood, I would suggest you talk with someone from the MotoGP Circuit or any of the other SuperBike Racing Circuits along with a Physics Book or Physics Professor; your Motorcycle physics/reality needs some adjustment.
1) At 160 mph (+ 60 mph avg. traffic) makes for a 220 mph force vector coming at each other head on! There is no time to react or swerve = Shego Grease Stain. She would be dead (even if she had full faculties and weren't in the throes of passion riding her magic Sybian with two wheels). At 160 mph people go straight, they don't turn or swerve or "quickly dart back and forth" (you don't "quickly" do shit at 160 mph except crash and die). At 160, you'd have drag racing on a closed track, NOT giant slalom on the freeway or anywhere else.
2) Even at sane speeds around 45 mph, goggles or a helmet are a must. The wind is too great, your eyes water shut. 160 mph? Yeah, right.
3) Sport bikes or SuperSport Bikes don't jump! Period. They don't launch or jump over anything! They are designed to hug the road, to ride asphalt at speed... not insanity. They aren't motorcross! (Even if a motorcross bike could acheive these speeds, IT couldn't do it)
4) (See: No Jumping) At 160 mph, not only would the bike NOT "jump" the divider or ditch; but even if Shego were Jesus Christ and Evel Knievel all rolled into one, you'd never land it (not the right suspension, and) at that velocity the 3D kinematic forces from both tires would go ape shit, destroying both bike and rider on landing.
Now if anyone's tempted to think you could manage all this in a car, well, you Sirs or Ladies, are retarded (and I hope they revoke your license real soon. So when you do manage to kill yourself in an act of Darwinian stupidity, hopefully it will only be you your killing and not some innocent couple or family). Even at freeway speeds you'd be a corpse (considering they could find enough of you to bury), let alone 160 mph!
Also, Dude, Seriously! You had 900 pages of Kim getting it on with the Tiger-Psycho over 15 chapters and Kim and Shego get chapters the length of a match book? Dude, Seriously!
Hey Hollywood, I would suggest you talk with someone from the MotoGP Circuit or any of the other SuperBike Racing Circuits along with a Physics Book or Physics Professor; your Motorcycle physics/reality needs some adjustment.
1) At 160 mph (+ 60 mph avg. traffic) makes for a 220 mph force vector coming at each other head on! There is no time to react or swerve = Shego Grease Stain. She would be dead (even if she had full faculties and weren't in the throes of passion riding her magic Sybian with two wheels). At 160 mph people go straight, they don't turn or swerve or "quickly dart back and forth" (you don't "quickly" do shit at 160 mph except crash and die). At 160, you'd have drag racing on a closed track, NOT giant slalom on the freeway or anywhere else.
2) Even at sane speeds around 45 mph, goggles or a helmet are a must. The wind is too great, your eyes water shut. 160 mph? Yeah, right.
3) Sport bikes or SuperSport Bikes don't jump! Period. They don't launch or jump over anything! They are designed to hug the road, to ride asphalt at speed... not insanity. They aren't motorcross! (Even if a motorcross bike could acheive these speeds, IT couldn't do it)
4) (See: No Jumping) At 160 mph, not only would the bike NOT "jump" the divider or ditch; but even if Shego were Jesus Christ and Evel Knievel all rolled into one, you'd never land it (not the right suspension, and) at that velocity the 3D kinematic forces from both tires would go ape shit, destroying both bike and rider on landing.
Now if anyone's tempted to think you could manage all this in a car, well, you Sirs or Ladies, are retarded (and I hope they revoke your license real soon. So when you do manage to kill yourself in an act of Darwinian stupidity, hopefully it will only be you your killing and not some innocent couple or family). Even at freeway speeds you'd be a corpse (considering they could find enough of you to bury), let alone 160 mph!
Also, Dude, Seriously! You had 900 pages of Kim getting it on with the Tiger-Psycho over 15 chapters and Kim and Shego get chapters the length of a match book? Dude, Seriously!
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November 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow! That was pretty intense, and I liked it! Very nice Shego -centric chapter, although it was full of half thoughts and she kept getting cut off while thinking, it somehow really made sense. A definite difference from your previous chapters, not the making sense part, that was there, but this choppy style of writing. Very nice!
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November 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was really intense. I could almost feel it myself. I fucking loved. I haven't had a chance to read this in a while, so I'm glad I finally caught up with it tonight (been really busy). It's fantastic! I definitely can't wait for the next chapter.
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November 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
All the KiGo fics I've read, no matter how different they may be in other respects, all seem to follow a set pattern:
1. They kiss.
2. They freak out, but neither really runs away. Instead, they have a little spat and talk out their issues.
3. They agree to work on this new development.
Naturally, since you didn't follow this pattern, you've officially thrown me for a loop. But it's a good loop. A change of pace is nice, and this is actually the most in-character reaction I've ever seen from Shego. Her character is defined by her tendency to run away from her problems. It's good to see an author finally acknowledge that.
Of course, it helps that Shego is the one who's still in denial about this whole thing. Kim has had months to come to grips with the fact that she's Gay, and, even if she's not completely okay with it yet, she's at least had time to think about desiring Shego. Shego on the other hand merely laughed off the notion that Kim "Want wants" her, so when she finds out that it's true... well naturally she feels a bit overwhelmed.
I like the way you portrayed Shego's thought process in this chapter. While other stories feature the classic internal debate, very few do it as skillfully as you do here. Shego is not actually arguing with herself, but rather trying to control her raging thoughts and calm the hell down. But despite her best efforts, she ends up coming as a result of her getaway vehicle. Proof that you can't run away from your problems, no matter how hard you may try.
Great chapter and I can't wait to see more of the fallout. :D
1. They kiss.
2. They freak out, but neither really runs away. Instead, they have a little spat and talk out their issues.
3. They agree to work on this new development.
Naturally, since you didn't follow this pattern, you've officially thrown me for a loop. But it's a good loop. A change of pace is nice, and this is actually the most in-character reaction I've ever seen from Shego. Her character is defined by her tendency to run away from her problems. It's good to see an author finally acknowledge that.
Of course, it helps that Shego is the one who's still in denial about this whole thing. Kim has had months to come to grips with the fact that she's Gay, and, even if she's not completely okay with it yet, she's at least had time to think about desiring Shego. Shego on the other hand merely laughed off the notion that Kim "Want wants" her, so when she finds out that it's true... well naturally she feels a bit overwhelmed.
I like the way you portrayed Shego's thought process in this chapter. While other stories feature the classic internal debate, very few do it as skillfully as you do here. Shego is not actually arguing with herself, but rather trying to control her raging thoughts and calm the hell down. But despite her best efforts, she ends up coming as a result of her getaway vehicle. Proof that you can't run away from your problems, no matter how hard you may try.
Great chapter and I can't wait to see more of the fallout. :D
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November 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Whoa. To go through all that while driving a motorcycle at around one hundred and sixty miles per hour, into on-coming traffic, and not hit one single thing. And I thought Kim could anything. Shego is one extraordinary woman - though by now, that's obvious. :P
Shego reacted just like I imagined - though I was half-expecting her to try something; like bite Kim's tongue before throwing her aside. What was unexpected for me was the fact that Shego was the one who ran away. After all, Kim was the one who was horrified by that dream of her and Shego, so it would have been understandable that she would run. But Shego... well, I just didn't see it coming.
Meanwhile, back where she left Kim...
Looking forward to the Kim's POV.
Once again, great job!
Shego reacted just like I imagined - though I was half-expecting her to try something; like bite Kim's tongue before throwing her aside. What was unexpected for me was the fact that Shego was the one who ran away. After all, Kim was the one who was horrified by that dream of her and Shego, so it would have been understandable that she would run. But Shego... well, I just didn't see it coming.
Meanwhile, back where she left Kim...
Looking forward to the Kim's POV.
Once again, great job!
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November 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
very nice chapter.
hope we can see the fight from shego's POV in the next chapter before moving on with the story. i'd really like to know what was going through her mind during the entire encounter.
hope we can see the fight from shego's POV in the next chapter before moving on with the story. i'd really like to know what was going through her mind during the entire encounter.
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November 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
My. God. You finally got to it, and it was worth waiting for, sorry I ever doubted you. that fight scene was sick. Can't wait to see what caught Shego's attention.