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May 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Incredible story, well written *applause*
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May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
DUDE... I can't wait for the party to really get started! Hey one question; has Kim and Ron shared with Joss and Wade? (Ron/Joss and Kim/Wade?) And if so, are you going to tell us about it? cause this is one of your best stories Z. Keep up the great work as always.
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May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I Love this story...and I can't wait for the future chapters with all of the hot action :D I hope Monique gets to try Ron's sausage like she wants :D
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May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Non-stop fun for the next few chapter huh?
Well then, 'nuff said. Hury up with the next few chapters!
Still as awesome a story as ever.
Well then, 'nuff said. Hury up with the next few chapters!
Still as awesome a story as ever.
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May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm a new fan of your story.I love all the chacraters in this story.From Kim,Ron,Bonnie,Shego,Tara,Josh,Hope,Fexil,Monique,Joss,Wade and the new ones.
So Wade and Joss are not into group swiping too much.I figure Ron and Wade where not Bi.So Kim is Bi but not her cousin.And they say there not into incest.But Kim made a comment about Joss buns when she was leaving.I don't know about that.One day you are going have to do a chapter with the Loads and Stoppables.Why do Joss last name Possible-Loade?Then just her husband last name?
And I can't get enough off Bonnie and Shego.Shego is mostly into Kim and Bonnie is slow falling for with Ron.Shego was there at the being of Kim and Ron sexslave drug nightmare.So Shego understand her almost much as Ron do.And Ron was Bonnie knight and shinning armor after Brick cruelity.That most of been rough for Kim parents to see their only daughter infect by the drug like that.
Now final you added Monique into the swingers party.I like her spice and forward ways about people.The why she reacted about Shego and Bonnie.She still didn't believe Kim and Ron about them been change people.She is going have too spin some personal time with Shego and Bonnie.It's going be interest to see two dom Monique and Ron do.Sound like Monique still think Ron is that same submits teenage boy.I wonder who will win and call the othere Master or Misters?
Thank for the story.
So Wade and Joss are not into group swiping too much.I figure Ron and Wade where not Bi.So Kim is Bi but not her cousin.And they say there not into incest.But Kim made a comment about Joss buns when she was leaving.I don't know about that.One day you are going have to do a chapter with the Loads and Stoppables.Why do Joss last name Possible-Loade?Then just her husband last name?
And I can't get enough off Bonnie and Shego.Shego is mostly into Kim and Bonnie is slow falling for with Ron.Shego was there at the being of Kim and Ron sexslave drug nightmare.So Shego understand her almost much as Ron do.And Ron was Bonnie knight and shinning armor after Brick cruelity.That most of been rough for Kim parents to see their only daughter infect by the drug like that.
Now final you added Monique into the swingers party.I like her spice and forward ways about people.The why she reacted about Shego and Bonnie.She still didn't believe Kim and Ron about them been change people.She is going have too spin some personal time with Shego and Bonnie.It's going be interest to see two dom Monique and Ron do.Sound like Monique still think Ron is that same submits teenage boy.I wonder who will win and call the othere Master or Misters?
Thank for the story.
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May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another fun addition to the story, I can't wait to see who wins the game.
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May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hardcore doesn't begin to cover it, my friend. this just keeps getting hotter. Keep up the great work!
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April 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
"...more content to splash each other than join in with the girls." I was about to thank you for knowing the difference between then and than, but then I saw this: “Much better then we ever did when we were younger.”
“I was rooming with Hope at the time, since Josh and I couldn't afford our own place at the time..." You seem to recently have developed a problem with repeating yourself and redundancy, too. "Kim just sat back disgusted, arms crossed across her chest." If her arms are crossed, then it is obvious they are in front of her.
“I was rooming with Hope at the time, since Josh and I couldn't afford our own place at the time..." You seem to recently have developed a problem with repeating yourself and redundancy, too. "Kim just sat back disgusted, arms crossed across her chest." If her arms are crossed, then it is obvious they are in front of her.
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April 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
"Her and tara knew the menu inside and out." - She and Tara knew the menu inside and out.
"...monogamous to they're group..." - You meant their, of course.
Oh, the innuendo never ends, but that's what makes it fun, especially with a good author.
At least you didn't misspell gaping. I can't tell you how many times I've seen gapping staring me in the face. And I did have to chuckle when I read Kim and Ron's restaurant revenge lines. "Master, she is being quite presumptuous." I love that line.
"...monogamous to they're group..." - You meant their, of course.
Oh, the innuendo never ends, but that's what makes it fun, especially with a good author.
At least you didn't misspell gaping. I can't tell you how many times I've seen gapping staring me in the face. And I did have to chuckle when I read Kim and Ron's restaurant revenge lines. "Master, she is being quite presumptuous." I love that line.
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April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
ACK!!!.... PLEASE FOR THE LOVE OF SANITY!!! Dude do you have to tease with the chapter? I can't wait for the Ron and Monique, (Bonbon or Kimmie?)scene! You seriously have my blood pumping for your next chapters! You do such great work on both FF sites. For what was suppose to be a one-shot it just keeps getting better so keep it up. P. S. please update soon!