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for The Conqueror

by AdamIam

person RosieB
schedule July 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The story line is enjoyable but would be so much better if you had a beta. Too many grammatical errors, run-on sentences and missue of commas. Otherwise good.
person Taramarine
schedule July 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yes, you should look into getting a beta. Some of your sentences don't even make sense.

'She would not trade one unwanted love to be his love.'

'It was his fire from his bending and it burned hotter then even thing she had even seen.'

person Novicegirl
schedule July 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was an excellent chapter! I am so happy you have decided to continue writing this. I am waiting to read more so hurry and post.
schedule July 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Bring it on! I am ready for more.
This is AWESOME Zutara.
BRING IT ON! Welcome back Bluflame
person Myliana
schedule July 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Saying that I am overjoyed that you have returned would be a GREAT understatement. You have to finish this I love this story because it is totally different from every other one I have read. It is weel done and I want to read more Zutara from you so get to it. I think you are Awesome at it!
person zutoph
schedule May 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nice so far. Waiting to see more.
person smex
schedule March 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMG Pleez update. I love this story it has a whole other angle from most stories.
person Warlock5184
schedule November 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good work with this story it is a nice change to the normal Avatar base fanfiction. You have taken the Avatar world and made it ur own. Hope u continue with this story line it was just starting to get good. :)
person Anon
schedule November 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like your story and your style of writing. I hope you continue your efforts, I think they are paying off! :)
schedule October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Update this PLEASE