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Hey love the story hope to read the last bit soon

Nice job! Alot of these stories just start right into mindless sex. You however have buildup to the plotpoint of sexual interaction...
Holy crap that sounded lame. "sexual interaction" Christ I sound like a idiot.
Anydangway keep up the good work.

cant waht for next capter

Well I have to say i've read several of your stories I didn't think to much of your Toph/sokka stories, partly beacuse of the age problem turned me off a bit. Even thou i'm a fan on the pairing I do have to say that they were well written but i'm here to talk about standard. And I have to say i'm really enjoying it althou I am finding your descriptions of the scenes to be a bit sparse. They could use some filing out I would say but otherwise it's a very good series and I think you've done a very good protrayl of the characters all around.

The purely sexual component is really well exploited, making it erotic and provocative. But there is more to your work, an emotional component that truly makes the story interesting, mature, and worth reading. All 3 characters' motivations and psychology are unique and credible, like Sokka adapting to the situation and Mai showing a warmer side of herself. I'm pleasantly surprised that you show Mai as a complex character, and that something inside her is unfulfilled and leads her to act in a detached way that might at first give the impression she's mean, when in this story it has more to do with how she perceives others assessing her.

Anyone can write smut, but writing an interesting story that goes beyond the purely sexual aspect is a rare thing. -Diego

I honestly don't think you could have made this work any better.

This is probably the best Avatar fiction I've ever read. It also help that Ty-lee is my favorite character. Love to see how it all turn out.

Booya that was beatiful baby.

P.S Go buy some of my foot cream, it good for you.

Man I am really enjoying this story. Please update I want to know what happens next. Could you also update your Bai Shan story some time as well?

Just got to the latest chapter. Saucy.

I'm not used to seeing updates happen so regularly. It's rather refreshing. Usually, when there's an author I'd like to see an update from, it takes months and months; and I'm seeing a new chap seemingly every other week from you. It's much appreciated reading.

The newest chapter has some hawt threesome goodness goin' on, but I've never been a big fan of the lez scene. For people like me, the lemony thrill comes primarily from imagining yourself in the male protagonist's place; and though I'd love to munch the rug of a haughty hotty like Mai with a cute gymnast in real life, it isn't what I'd do to them if given the chance (God willing). No, if I had my way, even Ty lee's limber body wouldn't be able to stand the next day. >:3

It was a great way to move the story along though. I didn't think the transition of "I'm going to kill him" to "I'm going to let him fuck me" would be as seemless as it was, but I was pleasantly surprised. You're still as clever as when you started on chapter 1, and that's one of the fic's most attractive qualities: you're not just reading (or rereading rather) the tired cliches and storylines of so many other fics before it, but an original idea put together in a competent way. It doesn't hurt that the characters are likeable and fucking each other, but even without that, I'd still read it based on the premise and quality of non-lemon content. That's when you know your (lemon) fic is good: when the story can stand on its own without fanservice (sex, generic violence, ludicrous comedy, etc). That goes for most any medium too. TV's crawling with it...But I digress. The fic is entertaining and, though it has the spice of porn, it could easily be a fic I'd read without it.

Again, kudos on a job well done. I look forward to the next chapter. :)