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March 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very nice, although you missed the obvious potential for food play. I mean, chocolate mousse? That is so begging to be licked off of something. ;)
Personally, I get the feeling that it would take a little more than that to get Stormy going. I've always felt that Stormy has trust issues, especially when it comes to something as intimate as sex. Still, nicely written. I loved how she bumped her head in the fridge when Baltor surprised her. :D The way she behaved in bed definitely sounds like her! I love how she made him wait until he said she was his main witch before letting him enter her, and how Baltor was willing to tell her anything she wanted to hear to get there. And it was so funny how she kicked him out after she was done with him! XD
I still say you could use a beta to clean up your stories a little. You've got the wrong word in a number of places, the kind of mistake a spell-ckecker won't catch. Mind if I clean this up a little bit and send it back to you so you can see the difference a good beta can make?
Personally, I get the feeling that it would take a little more than that to get Stormy going. I've always felt that Stormy has trust issues, especially when it comes to something as intimate as sex. Still, nicely written. I loved how she bumped her head in the fridge when Baltor surprised her. :D The way she behaved in bed definitely sounds like her! I love how she made him wait until he said she was his main witch before letting him enter her, and how Baltor was willing to tell her anything she wanted to hear to get there. And it was so funny how she kicked him out after she was done with him! XD
I still say you could use a beta to clean up your stories a little. You've got the wrong word in a number of places, the kind of mistake a spell-ckecker won't catch. Mind if I clean this up a little bit and send it back to you so you can see the difference a good beta can make?
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March 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I've seen it in Italian and it's promising :) but I don't think Baltor will be very pleased with them once they return XD I think some punishing is due when he has them turned back to normal. I'm gonna say no more since some people might not have yet seen it and spoilers ...
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March 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
My, you have been a busy bee Carla! ^_^ This promises to be a fun storyline. Nice to see Darcy getting a "head". ;) Your work could use a beta to clean up technical issues, but overall it's good. As for who's next, maybe tomorrow morning's episode will give you some inspiration in that department.