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July 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey it's me sorry, but i've been gone on a kinda of early summer vacation, I just got back and I'm about to start back where I left off, hope you've wrote a ton, I'm looking forward to reading more on both stories!
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July 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was great, and I'm sorry about your time in the hospital, hope your doing well now and that it wasn't anything to serious. Keep up the good work
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May 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well it's well thought out but alot of people will have problems with it because it isn't Zutara.
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April 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow that was amazing, I've been looking forward to Zuko finally opening up to poor Lan! I am loving this. Real quick I have a question, are you writing this to actually be the prequel to your darker story? I know they tie together, but I'm wondering if they're going to end up joining or if you've decided. Well I can't wait for your next update!!!
Chel
Chel
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April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I loved this chapter, keep up the good work, I also like your other work but loving this story so much makes it so sad, but it's a really good twist. Chel
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April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
First of all your welcome and you deserve a ton of praise your work is very interesting, and it shows how hard you work on it. I'm really liking the story and looking forward to your next update!!!
Chel
Chel
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March 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey great job on the story update soon
Chel
Chel
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February 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey I noticed you must have edited or something, but please update soon the suspense is killing me lol. Chel
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February 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey I love this story please update soon, you rock!
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February 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I cannot say that I read the entire story so I will not rate it. I have to say that to me it is kind of blah and just sits there and nothing jumps out at you.; sorry.
Some of your paragraphs are too long and I felt defeated by the time I got to the middle and did not want to continue.
It is hard to read a story when the characters are talking in the middle of a paragraph. You should hit enter before and after someone speaks. I know you said you did not have a beta but you can look at the stories on this page and see how it is done and maybe that will help you.
You do have alot of grammar problems in the three chapters I read.
This is only my opinion and I hope it does not offend you. FAB
Some of your paragraphs are too long and I felt defeated by the time I got to the middle and did not want to continue.
It is hard to read a story when the characters are talking in the middle of a paragraph. You should hit enter before and after someone speaks. I know you said you did not have a beta but you can look at the stories on this page and see how it is done and maybe that will help you.
You do have alot of grammar problems in the three chapters I read.
This is only my opinion and I hope it does not offend you. FAB