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Another great chapter you had done. Interesting how Azula is suddenly becoming open to Aang while visiting his cell. Nice work on introducting General Shinu in the story, especially mentioning his disagreements with Admiral Zhao. Also, Fire Lord Ozai won't allow Azula to be a heir to the fire nation because she's a female. That is quite a shocker to hear, because if Azula knew about this her trust in her father might shatter. Finally, it will be interesting how Zuko's escape plan turns out.

And the plot thickens really quickly. I'm getting more and more excited every time I read this. I can't wait to see what happens next. Anyway, keep up the great work. Until next time. Later. K15

Another awesome chapter! Great job.

Moore please?

Aloha,
Chris

Great update. Getting real interesting now. Hope the next update is soon as I will be eagerly awaiting.

Hey, that was pretty good. Not as good as me, or anything, but, well, you can't win 'em all :P

Oh, and you don't overthink your work; other people just sentimentalize the characters more than you. Keep writing, and be secure in the knowledge that at least one person understands if Twilight Princess keeps you busy too.

Okay, this'll be a bit toasty for you whirleeQ but please read on cause it'll get better. It's a pretty good plot so far, though throwing the firelord in there like an over glorified soldier = a really bad idea, you should never throw a ruler into that role- that's just simple chess, the king is undoubtedly the most valuable piece so you don't send him out while he has pawns to do the dirty work (in other words he should just be a figure-head for now- and yes I know I'm ragging on you right now but you'll have to admit I bring up a valid point sooner or later). So don't throw the Firelord in there like that- send in your Colonel Shinu to occupy Ba Sing Se, but leave Ozai back in the Fire Nation because right now he would whip all their asses without any trouble unless you've decided to make him a pansy which would take all the fun out of the story for your readers (it's important for you to think about your work through the eyes of your target audiance- and I'm well aware that I'm a horrid speller). Alright that's enough flaming, but that was just author to author to help improve the story a bit- cause I do like it. Yeah, the flame just covered the only issue that was bugging me seriously, not counting the part with Ozai coming in WAY too soon, I give you a seven out of ten. congrats! ;p

Beautiful work. Ignore the flamers, you write the way you want to write. More Zutara! :)

I liked this chapter, has a good build up!
Happy Holidays!

Zuko is my hero! = 3 I love it! = D I'm a Zutara fan myself. Great job! = )

Chapter Four was certainly a good chapter and I clearly didn't expect Mai to be so upset of Zuko being with Katara. I actually still believe that Mai cares for Zuko deeply since her child years, even though her feelings for Zuko didn't surface much in the second season. Interesting and unexpected plot twist you came up with.

Sokka and Toph's scene was also good and interesting when stopping the Fire Lord's message being deliver to Azula.

I'm also really curious what will happen in your story now that Azula doesn't know that her father is coming nor does he tell her in his words that the Avatar will be executed.

It is also nice for Zuko to trust Iroh again and would also be interesting to find out what his plan is.

Finally, I appreciate your response and opinion on the Water Oasis situation and your thought's on Azula's character. I wasn't really flaming you at all on the situation but just giving you a fair criticism. Despite that I'm still enjoying this story and will continue reading this. With this review finish, enjoy the holidays and I look forward towards the next chapter.