rate_review Reviews

This fic is awesome. The way it's written is tasteful and equally compelling. I really enjoy reading all your JQ fics, and I wish you would add more chapters to this story as it is very good. I must say it is my favorite.

Glad to see you continued this; Jonny and Jessie seem to have a real problem being on the same page at the same time. Hope they manage to meet up soon! :)

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It's clear that you really love this story, which I'm sure the author appreciates, but you've got it all wrong. If you read in detail, there's mention of Jonny climaxing every time they have sex. It's just done tastefully (i.e. "he exploded inside her" or "he finished a moment later."). The bodily function that follows is insinuated and does not need to be described in detail. There are also appropriate mentions of "clean up" throughout the story. It's very realistic in that sense. Impressively so in my opinion because most stories just throw that aside for all the sex stuff. Now I agree that the amount of sex is unrealistic, but this is fiction and ADULT fiction at that. You'd be on fanfiction.net if you didn't wanna read more adult content and so would I. Love the story and your others, Harry. I think all your reviewers love them too, but I still wanted to defend anyway! Update soon and have fun writting!

Good point White-Orchid. I forgot that. It seems, that the story has 2 incorrect matters. Dond get me frong Harry, This story is realy great. Both incorrect matters are on Jonny. First, he seems to be "drycumming", because in some cases, there is no "physical mess" left behind. And 16 times... (my girlfriend counted that). As a best of my knoweledge, the timeline is about litle over 24 hour. Quite... impressive performance from Jonny, altough not possible.
Still waiting and hoping for epiloque. Great job, update this one, or start with the new one, would you.
Oh, and White-Orchid, thanks for pointing that one out. You are rigth, btw. Men do ejaculate every time with orcasm, with one exeption. If, after really wild nigth... men can get orcasm without ejaculation, because there would be nothing left. (After 6 or 7 times or so...)

That was great. I really enjoyed their closeness and their connection to one another. But wow, that is a lot of love-making! It must be nice to be young like that. ^_-

I would love to see a follow up to this.

I love this story with a passion but there's just one question that keeps plaguing me (besides where's the next chapter?): Where the hell is Jonny's spunk? I mean, the kid has ejaculated almost once every chapter but I have not yet heard any mention of Jonny's pimp juice (please forgive the Sex and the City esque terms- I really don't feel like saying semen or sperm tonight for some reason). As a female, I can't call myself an expert on the male anatomy, but I was always under the impression that every time a man experienced an orgasm, he would ejaculate. Now if I'm keeping track properly, Jonny has cum in his jogging pants, in his car, in Jessie (several times without a condom- props to you, though, for placing a great amount of importance on protection), in a pool, and in a kitchen; all of these places would normally have to undergo some "cleanup" after such steamy love makin'. I love your take on sex, I love your dialogue, and I love your respect for the naked human form (down with censorship!), but I can't help but question the realism of this piece when there is absolutely no mention of Quest jizz. Okay, after that really weird rant about sperm, I want to tell you great job, and update soon!

Hi,Harry. Your story "First time" is probably the best sexual fanfic there is. I really like that its realistic, and focuses also on time "between fun". M/F stories are only sex stories I read. Keep up the good line. Its also "sweet" no hartcore material like BDSM or similar.
I do not like those.
I hope you would write an epilogue to it. Its wery good, well written, correct, and has only 1 (unrealistic) aspect on it. As a male myself, and knowlence of subject, I cuarantee that no male on this earth is able to ejaculate 16 times inside...24? hours.
No problems. Its easily "forgiven". All in all, a great fic. And devinetly deserves an epilogue.

With best Regards
Mike

I love both of these stories,but what happened to the third story?