rate_review Reviews

Hey!
I reaaallly love "Slow heat" It's a fascinating story!!

though, i do have one critic.
Everything is wonderful!! Don't get me wrong~
But I think a variation of phrases would bring so much more to the imagery to the story.
Arg, here I am trying to give a critic and I can't even put it in the right words.
Ok.
Example of what I mean:

tawdry coupling
but coupling with this dark-skinned creature
Did he want more than just this coupling
I recalled the heated coupling
I remembered the heated coupling
Fevered coupling

no offense but it was kinda like reading a broken record at times? (sorry if that sounds harsh i just arg, i'm horrible with words, thus I don't write. though that seems oddly hypocritical...it is just...I sure as hell cant express myself, but give me someone Else's expressions and I can go to town...or something like that hahaha )

ANYWAY
if you ever decide to revise chapter 16 (that's as far as I've gotten thus far) i think this should be a priority in what is to be changed.
Words such as union and embrace would add such wonderful color!
there are sure to be many more words out there I'm just to lazy to think of them (seeing that it is already 12:44am)

Moving on from that
I STILL ENJOY THIS STORY WITH MAJOR CAPS
<3
Becca

I adore the sweetness and warmth that Katara and Zuko are growing into. And I love Zuko's thoughts on how he's not going to compete w/ a boy who's barely hit puberty, so nice.

I love the development w/ Chit San ooooohhh I can't wait to see what you're doing with this.

Thank you so much for updating! I was afraid you forgot about us. This was a good chapter. I feel sad knowing what's going to happen. I was wondering, what's going on with Capture of the Maiden? I love all your work but that is my favorite Zuko and Katara story.

It's so clear how you convey the difference in maturity levels between Aang, Sokka, and Zuko -- and I really hope Suki's ok!

I suppose I owe you an apology for not reviewing each chapter, but since I just sat down and plowed through it one sitting, I hope you will understand that I loved every minute of it! In the last chapter, I noticed you said 2/3 done, so I am hoping there will be more? Meanwhile, I'm off to se what else you have posted! Thanks for sharing this wonderful story!

I love this story and can't wait for the next installment! :)
The only thing I would point out is that the depiction of Aang is really biased, which is fine seeing that it is told from Zuko and Katara's points of view, but there has to be something redeeming about him right? He can't just be wholly this whining little kid vying for her attentions, there should be some maturity to him. I'm not saying that I don't like what you've done with the characters in this story, but it would be nice if Aang had a fairer depiction somewhere along the line. Surely this is a zutara fic but maybe they can reach a compromise of sorts, as the story goes on? Just a thought. Keep up the great work !
With all due respect,
Rose

It is always a joy and pleasure to read your hard work. I wait for more anxiously! Walkingpapers

Thank you for updating! I really like this story. But is it just me or are the chapters getting shorter? You're a really good writer but this chapter felt like fluff. It left me thinking, that's it? I hope you update soon I want this story to keep going.

Awww gawds the ending killed me! Dude you do pillow talk so freaking well, I'm fanning myself here! Love, love, love, love this story!

I love Azula, I love the tension, I love the bending, I love the bromance....I LOVE IT ALL!

You are my favorite author for fanfiction of all time! Seriously when are you going to publish a book? You're awesome! Please update soon on all your amazing stories.