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for In Bai Shan

by Gunwild

schedule June 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
One key aspect that I like about your writing style is that it’s never monotonous, even after reading this for what feels like my seventh time, I always feel a strong sense of nostalgia. So in short reading a new chapter of your story feels like opening a bottle of champagne. That’s the highest complement that I can pay anyone.
person zomgdraike
schedule June 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I can't believe how great a writer you are! I'm surprised to see Zuko being the submissive one when it comes to sex--I would've figured that, with his upbringing, he'd be more willing to take control.

Also, your character dialogues are fantastic. I almost feel like I'm reading something that was copied straight out of an Avatar episode--albeit a late-night one :P If you ever get bored with writing 'dirty' fanfiction (though I've yet to see anything remotely 'dirty' anywhere in this story--your sex scenes are written beautifully!), you should try writing a regular Tokka fanfic :)

Thank you for writing this story, and please, update soon!
schedule June 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I am really loving this. The Sokka/Toph relationship that carried over from the first story is beautifully done, and I can't wait for the Aang/Katara stuff that the description promises. The story is also intruiging. I just can't wait to find out what their evil plan is. You must write more! I'm afraid I have to insist. More chapters are required.
person TayBear
schedule June 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Could you please update this? I'm dying to know what happens next!
person Soap Mctarvish
schedule June 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Now this is something to look forward to in the future.
schedule June 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You Must Write More!!!

I mean come one, you've stopped it right when it was beginning to get really interesting! And not just from all the sex!
schedule May 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I know the show isn't on right now, and it frustrates me I know, but please write more, continue on! This is a fiction (minus the adult content) that would be worthy of Nickelodeon's Standards! The entire story is compelling, original, and creative, and I hope you continue it soon.
person Tooty Fruity
schedule May 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Someone who writes an Avatar smut fic and writes it well? Praise the heavens! I can't wait to see what happens to Aang and Katara. Please update soon!
schedule April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Again, I'm sorry to ask, being that I take some pride in that I'm picky, but...

FOR THE LOVE OF GODDESS AND GOD, PLEASE WRITE A CONCLUSION!!! I KNOW YOU NEED INSPIRATION, BUT JUST WATCH OLD EPISODES!!! I CAN'T STAND NOT KNOWING WHAT HAPPENS NEXT! I'M YOUR LOYAL FANBOY! PLEASE! PLEASE CONTINUE!!!
schedule April 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You are one of the most talented writers on this site, but you really need to come back to this story because it's only a couple of chapters away from being an absolute (but very dirty) fanfiction classic