rate_review Reviews

pretty good
grammer needs to be worked on but not bad

That was---satisfying. Completely satisfying. I loved the ending, although I was bitter over Zuko's death, but it was noble and right. Perfect compliment to the whole tale. Wrapped up neatly, with a sweet touch at the end. Thank you for writing and sharing it.

Fate

This story is...wow. It's the best I've seen in over three years of reading fanfiction. You are a phenomenal writer, very detail-oriented, and what history and imagination! You have a fluidity that continues to surprise and amaze me, as I go from one emotion to the other, one mental picture to the complete opposite. The depth of feeling in certain poignant scenes leaves me completely in awe. I sobbed---sobbed!---over Zuko's childhood memories of his father's whip, and the darkness of it---making him kiss it, and then say "This scum does not deserve..."---holy fart, that chilled me to the inner depths of my soul. Frightening---and all too believable, because you created that impact. Damn.

And then to go on to Sokka's anger, the various details that made his "Skull Splitter/s" take shape in my mind's eye, wow. (Sheesh, am I eloquent, or what?!) I'm just amazed how you can move from one to the other, and I can feel painful empathy for Zuko as a child, and then angry sympathy for Sokka's own inner seething. I am not making any sense right now---I'm up way past my bedtime, LOL, and am barely keeping my eyes open. I can't believe I'm clicking off at such a cliffhanger---Katara about to enter the dreamworld to (gods, I hope!) save Zuko.

I can't say enough how much I am enjoying and adoring this story. The implementation of the Blue Mask and Zuko's skills as an assassin/magician, how the simple idea of a pampered princeling having access to the best teachers, and how you play off of his stubborn nature. (Totally agree there! it's his will that drives him, nothing else.) Introduction of the "chaos child" and how even the gods are against them (Zuko/Katara)---wow. Just, wow.

I hope you are writing your own fiction, and I would love to see you in print. You have true talent.

Fate

PS - I must add in that my favorite chapter/scene was "Madam Chi's Walls." Adored the interplay on words between Iroh's seige on the walls of Ba Sing Se (sp?) and his victory of Madam Chi, who seems quite a bit tougher. =)

The end of days---shit, I'm crying and can't stop. This sucks, but its still so great. Azula, Katara, damn. The emo is so overwhelming. Damn your genius.

Fate

I truely enjoyed reading this great fic, but what I really ehjoyed is that you give the characters personialty.
That alone just seem to bring them to life.

DUDE!! That was fuckin amazing i have been trying to write a Zuko/Azula fic for wuite some time. But the way you portrayed the characters and their suffering at the hands of Ozai was amazing ("I forgive you for everything" greatest line ever) my god i'm still geekin out about it. Ending was spectacular, thankyou.

this fic of yours is gr8!! you're a helluva writer & should keep up the good work!!

Haven't finished your story yet. Though I do like it so far. Interesting plot. Weird Prophecies have been done before but the never fail to add to the intrigue...

And now the part where I point out the flaws in your dialogue... Which is both my favorite and most hated thing I do in reviews... While I do like your story thus far and intend to read much more of it before the day is out I have to point out the following things...

1. It's the Battle of Ba Sing Se... not Ba Sing Sing...
2. The little blind Earthbender... you know the one doing Aang... Her name is TOPH not TROPH... slight difference.

At first I thought there were more, but... Can't remember them. I guess if there are more then they aren't that big...
I know I sound like an ass, and if you called me one to my face I wouldn't be surprised. I also suppose I sound like a stupid ass for making a big deal about something that...retarded...

Can't help it I'm afraid. My brain has an annoying tendency to get hung up on tiny incongruencies...
Well...bye!

You are a fucking genious. I cried. I did. Thank you, for this wonderful piece of work that was so full of the gritty reality of life and the emotions of human beings-- and not cartoon characters. I will probably marry you.

This very very good.