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July 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ok, I can see the reasoning behind the freaky capitalization, but it's still unnecessary. Congrats on giving a little depth to Bonnie's sudden change of heart with Ron.
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July 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
great story i love u explaning how ron is a clutz
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July 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
good stuff
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June 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Dude that was a great story. I was really hoping for a Ron,Kim and Yori threesome (about time Kim found out how great Yori is) I really loved how the story (even Motor Ed and Adrynal Lynn's sex scene)worked. YEAH SERIOUSLY BRO! A quick roundhouse kick knocks out Motor Ed once again. How does he keep getting in here? Dude I also got an idea, Camille Leon you know the shape shifter trades places with Kim but is "busted" when Ron and Bonnie get "involved". Sorry if its a bad idea but I thought you might like it.
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June 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Another most excellent chapter. 10/10
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June 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awesome work on the chapter Jayrich :D
I hope that Yori will be following with Ron and Kim back to the states to get better knowing themself :D
Can't wait for the next one
I hope that Yori will be following with Ron and Kim back to the states to get better knowing themself :D
Can't wait for the next one
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June 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I've enjoyed this story for quite a while, but these last couple of chapters have me scratching my head.
First, in the last chapter, Ron is accusing Kim of not being spontanious. Excuse me? Did they just forget the last 30+ chapters? Heck, just go back one chapter, and Kim spontaniously starts a make-out session with her mom! This arguement has absolutely no basis in reality, and kinda makes the whole chapter sound very forced.
And in this chapter, after everything, and everyone, Kim and Ron have done, she is still upset when a girl eyes Ron? This too makes no sense. She would be more on the side of wondering if Yori wouldn't mind a threesome.
First, in the last chapter, Ron is accusing Kim of not being spontanious. Excuse me? Did they just forget the last 30+ chapters? Heck, just go back one chapter, and Kim spontaniously starts a make-out session with her mom! This arguement has absolutely no basis in reality, and kinda makes the whole chapter sound very forced.
And in this chapter, after everything, and everyone, Kim and Ron have done, she is still upset when a girl eyes Ron? This too makes no sense. She would be more on the side of wondering if Yori wouldn't mind a threesome.
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June 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awsome so far always looking forward to your future chapters man you never fail to amaze. Can't wait to see how the race turns out and how much luckier the Ronman can get.
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June 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hehe...It seems that Kim,Ron, Monique and Bonnie forgot the rule they made.....that Ron only will be banging Kim,Monique and Bonnie :D
I hope the next chapter will have some sweet lesbian strapon sex and some anal sex for the Chosen one :D (He deserve some Kim and Yori backdoor action about now :D)
And I hope you will make a chapter with Dr. Director and Ron again :D
I hope the next chapter will have some sweet lesbian strapon sex and some anal sex for the Chosen one :D (He deserve some Kim and Yori backdoor action about now :D)
And I hope you will make a chapter with Dr. Director and Ron again :D
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June 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow. that chapter was wow worthy!