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by Morgoth22

person SM
schedule September 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I have to admit that this is getting something of an emotional response from me. I really want to see Ron swoop in to save the girls and discover who is behind this terrible conspiracy. Poor Shego... I too would nt have expected her to end up this way.
person Jawelik
schedule September 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very nice. Well written, well thought out, and I just love slave stories. Especially ones that feature dominant women, like the Mistress. I will be anxiously awaiting the next chapter. Be sure to email me when its done.

-Jawelik
schedule September 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You know, I thought based on the evidence, it was Shego who was looking to buy them. I guess this throws that theory out the window!

Eagerly awaiting more!
person Scorpinac
schedule September 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
YOW!! Somehow, I don't think Ron going berserk on these people would be a bad thing at all! Poor Shego... This just keeps getting more and more interesting... Laters.
person Scorpinac
schedule September 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Okay, not what I expected, but intersting all the same. But can Ron and Wade reach them in time?! I await the next chapter! Laters.
person Anon
schedule September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The premise for this story is quite interesting and overall, this looks like an excellent start: this piece has some solid potential. I'm definitely curious to see where things go, but before I get my hopes up, let's see if the author continues and eventually concludes this--as we've seen, these stories are, all too often, abandoned.
person Scorpinac
schedule September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I imagine Wade'll be the first to figure out what's going on, but how can Ron save them? Can't wait to see what you have in mind! Laters.
person Troomer
schedule September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Did you even try to proofread this? I didn't think it was that intriguing to begin with, but this second chapter is too incoherent for me to even finish it.
person Kothoga
schedule September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter 3, eagerly waiting for more chapters of this story
person SM
schedule September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Somehow I figured that Kim had to be a special order of some kind. It is also interesting to see people like Porter and Yori there. Quite the mystery developing... I appreciate how fast you've updated this.