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for Deep Sleeper

by Jawelik

person Shardae
schedule October 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Damn.... Thats fucked up. Now cuz of Kim's dumb ass Ron's got a kid... Juss because Kim couldn't say no to the dick... LoL. Add soon
person brian
schedule October 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
just finished this story. i have to say, it is fantastic!
the story is great, it just flows, seeing ron act the way he did, and wanting revenge, really makes we want to see what is going to happen.
and wow, that twist at the end, simply spectacular, please finish this soon, it is so good!
person Darklord2099
schedule October 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was one of the best Chapters I have ever read, can't wait to see what happens next (update soon plz)
person Rick
schedule October 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
He gets hard ons dreamin of Kim, when he cums he screams out kims name no mater who is makinghim cum.

If he was awake he would have wussed out of taking care of Kim's horniness using the it would effect their friendship excuse.

Well maybe in the end Ron's revenge is having Kim go thru withdrawals for a week or so then give her the screwing of her life
person Leah Phillips
schedule October 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This story keeps getting better and better, I can not wait to read more, and i'm really glad the Shego was Ron's first time awake. Also i think Ron should give Kim a taste of what it's like to be forced. Maybe agree to fuck her, give her one hell of a power fucking, then leave her on the edge, frustrated and battered. I think that would be brillent revenge for poor O'l Ron.

Hope you update soon. Good Luck
person Bonniefan
schedule October 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh man, Kim went so beyond wrong! And now that Ron knows, I hope he cuts her off while having fun with everyone else. Of course, the baby with Shego might hamper that thought for the future.
person Kothoga
schedule October 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
awesome work on the 6th chapter, I hope Ron (maybe with the help of Shego) to get his revenge on Kim
person dave
schedule October 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ron's ungrateful ass was sounding gay complaining about all of the sex he was getting thanks to kim. Kim should snatch him like shego did point out he would have said no if he was away and fuck his brains out while he is awake.
person RI100014
schedule October 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Reading that last paragraph, two words kept repeating itself in my head:

'Oh Shit...Oh Shit...Oh Shit...Oh Shit...'

Ron's a daddy?! And not only that but with a wanted felon. A world-class villian! With arrest warrants in over 11 countries!! OMG!!!

And as far as Ron finding out whom Kim shared her boytoy with: priceless. Especially to go from Bonnie, to just about the entire cheersquad, to Monique (his most trusted friend, outside Kim) to Mrs. Possible!!!

I would have liked to have had a Tara incident myself only because her character seems so sweet and innocent. Would have been quiet the shock to poor Ronnie.

And I actually agree with his view. Sure its every male's fantasy to have multiple sex partners. And Come On, just about all of us want to screw the cheerleaders at one time or another: if nothing else than just to shut them up. But he didn't even get to enjoy it for christ sacks. He was a man-whore without the enjoyment of being one! Now granted surprised me how long it took him to say "Fuck it" and just enjoy himself. But I can understand that as a side effect of the shock of finding out just how many people Kim shared him with. I mean come on! Surprised he didn't faint.

Eagerly awaiting his reaction to finding out he's a father. How's he gonna support her? Naco Royalties anyone ;). Also I think the best way to get revenge on Kimbo is to leave her out of his circle for a while. Sex withdrawel :) Oh man she'll be at his feet, begging and pleading for forgiveness in no time flat. Which given her stubborn nature would be reward enough for me.

Eagerly awaiting more, this shit rocks!

person dbfox007
schedule October 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Now this is getting good!! Very hot stuff!!! Keep on writing!!!