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August 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
When I read 'conclusion' I actually yelled 'Noooo!' outloud. Great chap yet again. The last one better be a long one! I know I'm hoping to see Kim and Ron finally get together (they'll have to get over the fact that they hurt eachother. Personally I'm hoping for a little romance between the two, since all the other scenes have been no-hesitation-get-straight-to-it sex. Not that I'm complaining though - I LOVED every scene you wrote).
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August 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
HOLY CRAP!!This story blows you a way.First you make it from a oneshot chapter to a great story.Then the sex scent were out of this world.Kim acting like a dog in heat obey her masters wanting ron forgivens.Shego having his baby and retired from villaining with her child.All cheerleading squad in the shower room kick ass.Alone one thing surprise me the most was jess fetish for a virgin.Hell even mrs.possible got in to it.
(.P.S.I'm sorry to see it come to a end.But all good thing..oh' you known the rest.It would be nice for sequal.)
(.P.S.I'm sorry to see it come to a end.But all good thing..oh' you known the rest.It would be nice for sequal.)
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August 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awesome work Jawelik...nice work on the 8th chapter...but I found an error....when Ron is gonna do Hope anally you wrote "I ever taken a girl up the ass?" when it should be "Have I ever taken a girl up the ass?" other than that it's fine.... pure gold this story is :D
Can't wait for the next chapter...although it will be the last one, but I hope you are gonna do some sort of sequel to this...
Can't wait for the next chapter...although it will be the last one, but I hope you are gonna do some sort of sequel to this...
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August 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i was kind of hoping that Kim got some from Ron in the end :)
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July 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It was a good story, nothing over the edge or OOC. Ron probably could sleep through something like that, multiple times.
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July 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Still great. Very natural progression. I'm looking forward to seeing if Zorpox is as deep a sleeper as Ron.
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July 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Naturally, Shego has a kid by Ron. Never thought I'd see that. So, now the boy knows he's got a harem of all the named girls in Middleton. What will he do now?
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July 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well, we've certainly gone beyond OOC now. It's amazing what a sex addiction will do to some people. So, I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Hope you update soon, but there's no rush. I'm used to people taking a while. I'm a betareader for Classic Cowboy, after all.
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July 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Deepsleeper was one of the first stories that I read here. I have to say that it is THE BEST also. Great story and glad that you could make it back to finish it.
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July 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was one of the best Chapters I have ever read, can't wait to see what happens next (update soon plz)(what about the other girls like Yori, Monique and Tara? also is this going to be a Ron/Harem Fanfic?