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mr. gunwild, you are to erotic literature as to what gunsmoke4 is to porn. absoultly wonderous.
p.s. would love to see more tokka, my prefered ship.
p.s.s. keep up the good work

This is an excellent story. You did an excellent job on characterizations. Loved it!
Also: "After all, he didn’t need underwear when she was around." Is my favorite line from this story.

this really is one of my favorite stories.

Wow, now that's a story.

OH... MY... GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This is like the greatest, smuttiest, Tokka-est story I have ever or am likely ever to read! AND I LOVED EVERY SINGLE WORD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

You = SuperGeniusKing!

Masterfully done! Best Toph+Sokka fanfic I've had the pleasure to read.

Wow! So far, this has been one of the best lemon fics I've read! The characters are mostly IC (though I don't recall Toph ever doing a victory dance before) and the plot dosen't get in the way of smex. Most excellent, and I've read more than few fic, both on AFF and other sites! Keep it up, and looking forward to more!

First, allow me to say that this is one of-if not the-best Avatar fics I've had the pleasure of reading. ...Even if it is pedo. heh. Down to business then. I have only two complaints with this story, one minor and one more of an annoyance. Firstly, while the story is overall well written, I tend to nit-pick. There were a few spelling errors, but nothing a beta wouldn't be able to catch. Thankfully, there were no grammatical errors, such as poor sentence structure, word misuse, and the like. As far as getting the thoughts you try to convey across, you do a marvelous job. Secondly: in chapter five, Toph make the observervation of Sokka and Katara being black. This is possibly (more than a little likely, actually) incorrect. While they are dark skinned, they are not negroid. If anything, I'd say they and their tribe most closely resemble the Inuit or Eskimo ( http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Inuit ). From my own observation of the series, NONE of the characters I've seen cross the screen could really pass for what, in the anime style (or the anime-esque style Avatar uses), a black person. Hell, spotting someone that looks white (caucasian) as opposed to asian (mongoloid) of some kind is pretty damn difficult. I'm not pointing this out to make racist comments or somesuch nonsense, far from it, rather just making an observation. ...If I were going to do that, I'd say something like "besides, it's too COLD where they are for them to be black! If they came from Kyoshi maybe..." THAT would be racist. Like I said, it's more of a annoyance than anything that detracts from the story and absolutely be corrected.

not bad

I just recently became addicted to Avatar, so as far as I can tell the characters are easily recognizable. Can't blame Sokka there, a guy has needs (I can rerlate to that) and you depicted incredibly well his feelings. I liked the guy from the first episode my girlfriend coerced me into watching, and I like the way you render him here. Long story short, I was looking for this story after seeing a fanartabout it by Karek at the shoujoai hentai forum, while I was researching more info about the show. Found Karek at Devianart and fortunately there was a link to your fic. Love it so far.