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July 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is a INCREDIBLE story! It's all so dramatic and sensual and gahhh! :D Keep up the good work!
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July 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Finally! Is Zuko going to finally tell her what is really going on?
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July 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Update soon i just found your works and i love them. I worked quite a few days to get this one this far and i'd love to read on post soon!!!
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July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Dearest Spleefmistress,
You, my dear, and a genious. I have read many fan fiction in my day. And I mean, MANY, but none as well written, and near flawless as this. Your other stories are marvelous, but this is by far my most favorite.
You see, I find plot driven Fan Fiction to be much more impressive. Anyone with a computer and a basic concept of sex (aka: Penis goes in vagina = sex) thinks they can write one of these. That is a lie. That is bull shit. That is crap. One page stories with six lines of dialogue, two paragraphs of hardcore fucking, and one closing sentence does not make a story. I can honestly see removing the sexual aspects of this story, adding to the beginning, making a different sort of transition from ATLB to this story line, and putting it one the air. I think it would be simply fabulous. You've truly studied your characters, you've explored them in ways I've never seen in a fan fiction. Not to mention your particular research on the culture, and careful naming of characters to match their personality, it was like read a soap opera, only I like it. (I detest soap operas, too much bull shit) I simply could not stop reading it. I've been captivated by your story, even going so far as to SKIP the sexual scenes when the plot thickened. It just seemed so plausible. Except for Toph and Zuko making a baby, but only because I can't see Toph having children. I would be more than willing to purchase and read anything you may publish, and be a dedicated fan girl for as long as you write. And I would LOVE to chat via e-mail.
You, my dear, and a genious. I have read many fan fiction in my day. And I mean, MANY, but none as well written, and near flawless as this. Your other stories are marvelous, but this is by far my most favorite.
You see, I find plot driven Fan Fiction to be much more impressive. Anyone with a computer and a basic concept of sex (aka: Penis goes in vagina = sex) thinks they can write one of these. That is a lie. That is bull shit. That is crap. One page stories with six lines of dialogue, two paragraphs of hardcore fucking, and one closing sentence does not make a story. I can honestly see removing the sexual aspects of this story, adding to the beginning, making a different sort of transition from ATLB to this story line, and putting it one the air. I think it would be simply fabulous. You've truly studied your characters, you've explored them in ways I've never seen in a fan fiction. Not to mention your particular research on the culture, and careful naming of characters to match their personality, it was like read a soap opera, only I like it. (I detest soap operas, too much bull shit) I simply could not stop reading it. I've been captivated by your story, even going so far as to SKIP the sexual scenes when the plot thickened. It just seemed so plausible. Except for Toph and Zuko making a baby, but only because I can't see Toph having children. I would be more than willing to purchase and read anything you may publish, and be a dedicated fan girl for as long as you write. And I would LOVE to chat via e-mail.
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July 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMMMGGGGGGGGGGGG NOOOOOOOOOOOOO I FORGOT SHE WAS CARRYING THAT PACKAGE!!!!! THAT'S SOOO HORRIBLE!!!! ZUKO U SHOULD FEEL LIKE SHIT!!!! i find it hilarious how he was trying to throw her off by trying to be seductive lmao ooooooh man now wat zuko? NOW WAT!! lmao thats sooo sad n horrible i cant believe she lost the baby :'( i wanted to cry lmao
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July 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ahahaha oh my god
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July 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
excellent!!! fantabulous! i loved it, and can't find a thing to critique!
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July 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This chapter made me tear up a bit, very angsty. Too bad about the baby D: Excellent job
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July 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Another exciting chapter! Aw, but I wanted Katara to have the baby... Poor Zuko. Katara's gonna kill him when she wakes up. Please continue the story. I always look forward to reading more!
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July 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
WHY MAN! WHY!
DAT BABY AIN"T DO NOBODY NOTHING MAN!
WHY DID U BUILD UP SO MUCH HAPPINESS ONLY TAKE IT AWAY MAN! WHY!
WASN'T THE HELL WITH ENKI ENOUGH MAN!
WHY!
I WANNA SEE HOW U GA RESOLVE THEIR PROBLEMS NA!
MAN!
DAT BABY AIN"T DO NOBODY NOTHING MAN!
WHY DID U BUILD UP SO MUCH HAPPINESS ONLY TAKE IT AWAY MAN! WHY!
WASN'T THE HELL WITH ENKI ENOUGH MAN!
WHY!
I WANNA SEE HOW U GA RESOLVE THEIR PROBLEMS NA!
MAN!