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June 8, 2022 at 12:00 AM
This is an old favorite. I love how things build up and the contrast between the innocent peeping at the beginning and how intense things are when both girls finally get fucked, especially with the "big surprise" promised for Kim. I'd love to see this continued some day, or more work in the same vein.
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March 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
very nice
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December 25, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Given that Bonnie is portrayed as a shallow, snobby, gold digging bitch in the series, I could easily see this being like an X-rated, Kim Possible version of Mean Girls. It could also explain how Shego really became the Supreme One in 'A Sitch in Time'.
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July 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I loved this. Please continue it soon. I hope Kim gets to have some more sex before she gets her big surprise :) I'd also like it if Ron could get involved somehow. Maybe Josh or Ron could knock up Mrs. Dr. P too?
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May 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Please please continue this! If you need beta reading or suggestions, I (and many others, I'm sure) would be glad to help out.
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May 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow, Binnie is a vindictive bitch. I wonder if Bonnie realizes that in her quest for petty revenge she just doomed the world to being taken over by one of any number of villains only Kim and Ron seem capable of stopping. I hope she likes being the cumslave of some crazy villain; because we all know the cheerleader types are the first ones to be taken.
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March 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Great work on this chapter. I believe it is one of the finest stories of its type I have ever read.
Aside from being clearly written and beautifully paced, I really enjoyed how story gradually shows Kim going further and further over the line, from being enticed to take a peek at the boys to having sex with her ex-boyfriend by the end. There aren't a lot of authors who'd attempt something that gutsy, let alone ones who could write it convincingly. But it didn't feel at all forced or unnatural, with the great description of Kim's feelings and Bonnie coaxing her at just the right times. It honestly felt like Kim was convincing herself to go a little further at each stage.
I'm glad it didn't feel saccharine or romantic at all; at the same time, it doesn't feel like any throwaway romp. The story doesn't forget of the serious consequences of Kim's actions; for example, the last paragraph hinting at the high price for her indiscretion.
I also liked how you paint Josh and Kim's perception of him in the early part of the story--having Kim snarl at Josh when he first approaches her. That makes it especially hot when, not long after, Josh is pounding her and Kim's demanding he finish inside her. It really illustrates how far gone Kim is here; ordinarily she wouldn't be interested in him at all, but here, just a look at how well-endowed he is and she starts kissing and fondling him, and before long, asking him to fuck her. It wouldn't be nearly as convincing it it were a guy she liked or even was indifferent too.
If you'd like any suggestions for future chapters, here's a few: Bonnie enticing Ron and another girl (Tara, maybe) into having sex, with Bonnie hoping he'll knock her up, to drive another wedge between him and Kim, and to give Ron his own bundle of joy to deal with; Kim learning how Bonnie set her up and getting back at her by arranging for Ron or Josh to get Bonnie pregnant, too; Bonnie coaxing Kim into spreading her legs for other boys in other places; and then later, when Kim finds out she's pregnant, she has no idea which guy is the lucky one.
It's been a while since the first chapter was posted, but I sincerely hope the story is continued some day. Regardless, congratulations on your excellent work and I wish you even more success in your future writing endeavors.
Aside from being clearly written and beautifully paced, I really enjoyed how story gradually shows Kim going further and further over the line, from being enticed to take a peek at the boys to having sex with her ex-boyfriend by the end. There aren't a lot of authors who'd attempt something that gutsy, let alone ones who could write it convincingly. But it didn't feel at all forced or unnatural, with the great description of Kim's feelings and Bonnie coaxing her at just the right times. It honestly felt like Kim was convincing herself to go a little further at each stage.
I'm glad it didn't feel saccharine or romantic at all; at the same time, it doesn't feel like any throwaway romp. The story doesn't forget of the serious consequences of Kim's actions; for example, the last paragraph hinting at the high price for her indiscretion.
I also liked how you paint Josh and Kim's perception of him in the early part of the story--having Kim snarl at Josh when he first approaches her. That makes it especially hot when, not long after, Josh is pounding her and Kim's demanding he finish inside her. It really illustrates how far gone Kim is here; ordinarily she wouldn't be interested in him at all, but here, just a look at how well-endowed he is and she starts kissing and fondling him, and before long, asking him to fuck her. It wouldn't be nearly as convincing it it were a guy she liked or even was indifferent too.
If you'd like any suggestions for future chapters, here's a few: Bonnie enticing Ron and another girl (Tara, maybe) into having sex, with Bonnie hoping he'll knock her up, to drive another wedge between him and Kim, and to give Ron his own bundle of joy to deal with; Kim learning how Bonnie set her up and getting back at her by arranging for Ron or Josh to get Bonnie pregnant, too; Bonnie coaxing Kim into spreading her legs for other boys in other places; and then later, when Kim finds out she's pregnant, she has no idea which guy is the lucky one.
It's been a while since the first chapter was posted, but I sincerely hope the story is continued some day. Regardless, congratulations on your excellent work and I wish you even more success in your future writing endeavors.
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August 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Dear Mr. Dutchman,
A wonderful story, but would I wouldn't expect anything less from another dutchman. Please if you wish to continue, I am completly behind you one hundred percent.
Until we meet again,
His Imperial Majesty, Byron, the Second Emperor of the Netherlands
A wonderful story, but would I wouldn't expect anything less from another dutchman. Please if you wish to continue, I am completly behind you one hundred percent.
Until we meet again,
His Imperial Majesty, Byron, the Second Emperor of the Netherlands
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November 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I thought that was great. Very erotic and detailed. I especially love how wanton the situation is--Kim gets involved (and then gets deeper and deeper into it) purely to gratify escalating sexual desire, with no thought of any other consequences (which makes it even more interesting that there are major consequences).
I hope there are more chapters. Maybe Bonnie's got something planned for Ron, too?
I hope there are more chapters. Maybe Bonnie's got something planned for Ron, too?
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July 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow that was good hope you update son because this has got to be the best kim fics ever written
With love; Imasuky Lomae
With love; Imasuky Lomae