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by starfirekiller

person JdWheels
schedule August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I may not be the best writer in here, but this sucked big time.

Your spelling was bad, your grasp of english can onl;y be discribed as almost drunken and you rambled. The story idea was good though. My suggestion is to go back, rewrite it and really think it through... if you are unwilling to do that, perhaps you need another hobby... like picking fly shit out of pepper.
person Anon
schedule July 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You suck at LIFE.
person Anon
schedule July 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please spare the rest of the human race and DONT CONTINUE!!!!! You have no idea of what you are doing! You ramble on, have no focus, one can see that you are just in for the ride. I dont have a problem with the theme. I am no prude... but please if you are making an already iffy theme your main idea, then please use the correct grammar and spelling... I really dont want to have to read or have others read so much trash in one unfortunate collection of letters... yeah, letters this has no sense at all... just PWP and yes that's how you spell it.
person Anon
schedule July 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ok guys this is my first so give me your worst...hahaha i rhyemd or however u spell that
i might continue


OH... yeah... I forgot...its "rhymed" you tard! GAME OVER!
person Random Flamer #534
schedule June 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ummmm.... i think it's spelled "while" not whale but i do enjoy whales!
person general nazor
schedule February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yeah,no.
By by nightmare!
person Anonymous Flamer
schedule February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
....the FUCK!?
person Mack
schedule January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
....You can't write, this isn't writing, this is just random sick crap. You can't even SPELL you amazing tard face.
person Christopher
schedule January 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
If you're going to write a story about a small girl being brutally raped and sadomise that will freak out the weak hearted, at least include proper grammar and spelling on your fanfic.
person Contec
schedule January 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It was good ,but i can be better with some few changes...if you want help just send me a mail and i help you.