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September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Seriously, learn proper grammar, learn to spell, use a spell checker, get a beta, and work on the whole 'lack of a plot' thing.
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August 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
>_< it's ok....
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December 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this story is good
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December 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was good but you need to work on grammar and spelling issues.
Also i suggest when writing stories like yours please try to remember to use smut terms and by the way its sperm not goo because when you read goo it sounds like shit.
But it was really very good.
anyway,
JoxBox
Also i suggest when writing stories like yours please try to remember to use smut terms and by the way its sperm not goo because when you read goo it sounds like shit.
But it was really very good.
anyway,
JoxBox
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December 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not bad. But its hard to read sometime. Anyway, nice yaoi and KEEP UP WITH THE GREAT WORK!!!!
-CYA!!!
-CYA!!!