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November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not to be a bitch or anything, but this is getting a little old.
I dislike fanfics that have random romance, you didn't explain why Raimundo feels for Jack, and you didn't explain why Jack feels for Chase. You're also rushing this relationship by making Raimundo very out of character and romantic with Jack. Jack, while grateful, would most likely reject Raimundo's feelings anyways because of fear and Raimundo, knowing his stubborn, masculine personality wouldn't admit his feelings to Jack so openly and be that physical with him at first. I dunno, it just seems a bit rushed and unexplained.
Please develop a bit of a plot as to the history behind Raimundo and Jack to make this pairing work, because so far there's nothing supproting it.
I dislike fanfics that have random romance, you didn't explain why Raimundo feels for Jack, and you didn't explain why Jack feels for Chase. You're also rushing this relationship by making Raimundo very out of character and romantic with Jack. Jack, while grateful, would most likely reject Raimundo's feelings anyways because of fear and Raimundo, knowing his stubborn, masculine personality wouldn't admit his feelings to Jack so openly and be that physical with him at first. I dunno, it just seems a bit rushed and unexplained.
Please develop a bit of a plot as to the history behind Raimundo and Jack to make this pairing work, because so far there's nothing supproting it.
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September 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hi, I dont have an account here, im more like, someone who comes to just read fanfiction. And, i must tell you, your story is great, one of the best Jack/Rai stories ive e v e r read. im not sure how old this story is or how long youve left it alone, but i think you should definetly continue!!
sincerly,
corinne AKA pinkealing
sincerly,
corinne AKA pinkealing
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July 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I hope you continue on with this story, its got great detail and a nice storyline. I love how its turned out.
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July 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I must read more of this A.S.A.P. This is a great story. I can't wait for it to continue. After all, it's hard to find any gay Xiaolin Showdown stuff.
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July 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
XD I loves it...make sure you update soon so I can get me some RaixJack smut, m'kay?
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July 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
LOVE IT, Please continue this fic and update soon, and I love the bit at the end of the 5th chapter, it's sort of like a teaser of whats to come even if the actul (sp?) lemon is coming for a while, anyway please as stated before update soon
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June 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this is the first RaixJack fic I've ever read.
And, dear god, I must say I've found a new pairing to look for...XD
Also, I liked the story a lot, so keep on writing! :)
And, dear god, I must say I've found a new pairing to look for...XD
Also, I liked the story a lot, so keep on writing! :)
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December 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh Damn that was one good fic I'd never thought of Rai and Jack likke that before.
I really hope that you update soon i'd like to know what happens with Rai and Jack.
I hope Clay and Kimmiko get something going on as well.
Then you could find someone for Omi he's a real cutie.
But I think Chase needs his ass kicked nobody deserves to die like that not even "Evil Boy Genious Jack Spicer"
I really hope that you update soon i'd like to know what happens with Rai and Jack.
I hope Clay and Kimmiko get something going on as well.
Then you could find someone for Omi he's a real cutie.
But I think Chase needs his ass kicked nobody deserves to die like that not even "Evil Boy Genious Jack Spicer"
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December 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love it! Please update soon.
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December 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oooh, Rai and Chase fighting over Jack... that would be nice. Glad you wrote more! Now write even more!