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August 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
When are you going to update this fanfic and show Jade and Paco actually doing it? I really wanna see what those two will do in the shower. This site needs more stories about Jade and Paco having sex with each other.
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January 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is a very good story so far. Continue to update. I want to see what happens between Paco and Jade next. I also would like to see another story about Paco and Jade as a couple on this site, since this seems to be the only one.
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July 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You should use short statements to increase the pace of your reading. Other than that, its a good job.
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October 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is a very good story so far. Could you update it real soon? I want to see what Jade and Paco do next.
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January 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Where's the third chapter? You started off so well and now you don't update anymore.... U.P.D.A.T.E... I want more of this :)
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December 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
holy shit this is good. you are a seriously good writer and i would like to see your work elsewhere as well. you seem to be focused on more of setting this up to be a love scene rather than just mindless sex(this is not bad, just talking about how others do this). I really like this story and the very way that it is writen. you should think about professional writing. i know that i would buy them and knowing the user base on this site, i'm pretty sure you would get a good sale.
Sincerely
The Ninja
Sincerely
The Ninja
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December 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's scary how well you're able to portray 13 year olds having, uh, relations like that. If I was thirteen and with a girl I really liked like that, I think that's exactly how things would be; emotionally anyway. Superb work in catching a realistic feel and a very intense atmosphere for several key scenes (And I think you and everyone else knows just which scenes I'm particularly referring too).
At risk of sounding like a pedo deviant, I look forward to reading the promised shower scene. :)
At risk of sounding like a pedo deviant, I look forward to reading the promised shower scene. :)
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November 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is one of the better stories I've read. You can really bring a person into the story. Very few grammar errors(unlike so many other stories around here). Great passionate and romantic emotion. It would be great to see more of your work.
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November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A very GOOd done chapter, even if it was a little small (no meaning disrespect) PLEASE update in the shadow of love soon or at least put a date of when are you going to update your histories.
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October 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was cool,i really liked it.
P.S
Could you put the other history(Shadows of Love) finale soon? I would really apreciate ,it and is very good
PLEASE?
P.S
Could you put the other history(Shadows of Love) finale soon? I would really apreciate ,it and is very good
PLEASE?