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HAppy Halloween

Well this is an awesome tale of carnal desire! While we always approve of Shego/Bonnie, because it just works, a little surprised we are that there is no Monique/Kim! Still if there's going to be a tale after that pathetic episode, SO the Drama, then we guess this would be how it goes. Italian, huh? We always figured she was of Latinic/Spanish descent! And we also figured her name had to be Sheila! Because her brothers are Herman, Melvin and the twins names never given. Anyway, great tale!

Gotta say, loved the story, BUT....there was a major jump in the continuity of the story.

The last chapter had a huge break in the continuity. You stated in the last chapter, that Bonnie had never rimmed anyone, but in an earlier chapter, she and Tara had a very similar experience as the last...Bonnie covered her ass in chocolate and rimmed her..which was awesome by the way. Just wanted to make sure you keep you story in line..trying to help, not discourage.

Also, I want to point out your grammar..not that it's bad, just that your punctuation and capitalization needs working on..tends to take away from the story a bit. You'va has several instances where the quotes weren't always closed and you had to figure out where the conversation started and stopped.

I know it's porn to most, but I like to be able to enjoy it without trying to think too much about where people start and stop talking...

Keep going and think about my suggestions...

FREAKING EXCELLENT!!!

you probably wont put this in, and you probably already decided who it is that "did" Tara, but if it's a voting thing, i want to vote Ron. Ron seems like he would do it if his ego was big at the time.

very erotic. keep it going

I knew when it said dancer wanted,

and It's call the Pink KItty Cat Club?

How the hell could she not realize it's a strip club.

This is amazing. I never imagined that Kim Possible could be erotic, but you're doing a great job.
Keep it up! :-)