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for Her Eyes

by noirebony

person Tama-sama
schedule October 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hmmmm, update soon? o.O I love this story, and would hate for it to die.
person Florville
schedule September 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter, I love how it adds a whole element of mystery and a sub plot to the story as well. And it's great that you kept the identity of the caller a secret...it adds tension to the story and leaves the reader on the edge. It's a pleasure betaing for you. Great work, I'm really looking forward to more!

~Florville
person Florville
schedule September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
AWWW!!!! I LOOOOOOVED this chapter! *LURVE* And yes, I got your email.

I just love the whole concept of rubies and sapphires, and it was a great title for the chapter. Excellent work, that was a really nice touch, which I liked quite a lot. You have a real skill for setting...very poetic, you seem to be a very image-driven person, which I love in a writer. The image of the golden sunlight coming through in bars was awesome. A lot of people don't realise that those are the things that stay with readers; images that the writer can conjure in the reader's head. When you make someone visualise something, you create the picture and the story in their head. I could go on and on about how much I love that aspect of your style, but I must move on.

Oh, and heck, I wanted to say, that was a good drawing you put the link up for. And I'm smacking myself now for being a total dumbshit; I never clued in to the fact that I could draw your character for you if you want. So if you want me to try my hand at doing a sketch of Moody, feel free to let me know. If you wanna see my other work, and if you haven't checked out my site yet, here's the link: http://florville.deviantart.com/

*LURVE* And keep writing!
~Florville
person Florville
schedule September 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I just wanted to say that I've been reading this story since the beginning, and I must say that this is the first time I've actually liked a story that contains an original character. Most of the others can just be written off as Mary Sues, but I really like yours, because it actually has a plot to it. Sorry I haven't really reviewed before now; I wanted to make a suggestion, though. While this story is excellent, I think you need a beta to fix up the grammatical errors. I don't mean to offend you, I hope I'm not *hides*...but I was wondering, could I do the honours? I'd love to beta your story for you, because it's really, really well-done and I quite enjoy it. Feel free to get back to me, my email is sugarsteph14@hotmail.com

Again, I'm really loving this. *drools at Zim masturbation chappy*

~Florville
person Yaoifanboy
schedule September 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
:O

No way! You get Florville as a beta! (I feel like I'm talking about her like an object... sorry Tallest Flor :( ) lucky! I have to make a fanfiction... I used to have ARCHIVES and ARCHIVES of Zim fics and other fics that I wrote... but they were all deleted... so yeah... anyways, good story so far, so yay! *lurve*
person Yaoifanboy
schedule September 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What's up with chapter 10? O_o
person Yaoifanboy
schedule September 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! This must be the only recent thing on AFF.net that is Invader Zim and actually uses toys! I like this chapter a lot *devilish grin*
person Yaoifanboy
schedule September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
MORE SEX!! MORE SEX!! XD I like this story... glad you finally updated! ^_^
person Kharn
schedule August 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey! more chapters! Very nice, odd plot though. Were could this be going...? Hoping to see more!
person Yaoifanboy
schedule August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I'm beginning to really like this story! Please continue, and if you could, make the chapters a little bit longer, please? Thanks, I really like this story so far ^_^