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U ARE EVIL....VERY EVIL.... geez it was just getting good...man...u had to cliffy it huh...damn...oh well..i guess i might come bak for the rest of the story...talk to ya laterz.....UPDATE!!!!!!

Love Always,

Dark Sango

very nice ;). very nice indeed. i like the way you've change the whole feeling behind the story by taking greater time with each girl and giving ron a more mature aura about him. also cudos on the spanish. hey keep this up and you may trun me into a loyal fan.

FREAKENG HOT MAN! as Quaigmier from family guy would say: GIGGIDY, GIGGIDY, GIGGIDY, GIGGIDY, GIGGIDY!

KEEP IT GOING...UR DOING FINE....I LIKE THE STORY..ITS REALLY GREAT...AND QUITE INTENSE...IN THE WORDS OF RON " DAAAAMMMMNNNNN" LOL....ANYWAY..KEEP IT GOING..ID LOVE TO READ MORE..AND IM ALSO WRITING A STORY..BUT ITS ABOUT INUYASHA...AND HE ALREADY MATED WITH KAGOME..I WROTE THE LEMON OUT OF IT..BUT IF U WANNA READ IT ITS UNDER INUYASHA/KAGOME PART...HAVE FUN....THE NAME OF IT IS "FUTURE LIFE" JUST NOT IN CAPITAL LETTA'S...ANYWAY..EMAIL ME WHEN U UPDATE....THX

Nice use of comic relief at the end there. Keep it up

Man you like all them girls, don't you! Lol Yeah there hot and Ron is a very luck sun of a bitch! Anyway im glad your doing this fic, its pretty cool. Later :)

Damn! my compliments to the chef, cause this story is cooking! a standing ovation to you, sir!

Thanks for the compliment. You're doing Really well with this story. I've been enjoying every step of the way. I'm looking forward to the rest of the story. 'A Ron sandwich'. heh. If you decide to do a third story in this series, let me know. I'l give you a hand. The Monique chapter flowed pretty well, but the Jessica chapter seemed a little choppy. You could smooth it out a little. The only other suggestion I can offer is that you use more of the senses. Taste and smell are important too. There's also more to sound than what a woman makes with her mouth and lungs. Theres the sound that silks make as you drag them over flesh. Even breasts make sounds. And some of those sounds are the most erotic sounds in the universe.

Short form: Keep writing, Dammit!!! Keep writing or I'll be forced to conduct a daring daylight commando raid and force you to write more. Since I can't write a decent sex scene, I can only sit in awe of what you have done. Just keep doing it.

when are you going to post the next chapter

TALK ABOUT INTENSE....I LIKE IT...I LIKE IT VERY MUCH...I WANNA READ MORE..DAMN..TALK ABOUT LEMON AFTER LEMON...I DONT SEE HOW RON CAN CONTINUE AFTER ATLEAST 2....WOW...WELL HOPING TO READ MORE...CANT WAIT....UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!..AND IF U WANT..U CAN EMAIL