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September 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that was incredible. I loved how all the characters were so... incharacter. Dil was his silly self, and everyone's dialouge was worded exactly how they would actually say it. One thing that seemed off was Lil though. Its hard to explain but I just don't think coming out as a nudist is like coming out gay, and I felt disappointed that after being with Kimi she was straight. Thats just me though, it was probley for the better that way.
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June 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This was an exceptionally well written story. I love how you fit everything together.
I'm a pretty open-minded person myself, so I found this story well written for the emotional level as well as the plot level. I look forward to reading some more of your work later!
I'm a pretty open-minded person myself, so I found this story well written for the emotional level as well as the plot level. I look forward to reading some more of your work later!
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August 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like it. It's real, the characters aren't perfect or fleeting. I do wish you'd be more descriptive of the rooms.
Constructive advice: maybe you could use your future descriptions of the rooms/places (if you decide to, since there's nothing wrong with your work) to generate a symbolic "mood" like if the room is dark, use that to your advantage.
Constructive advice: maybe you could use your future descriptions of the rooms/places (if you decide to, since there's nothing wrong with your work) to generate a symbolic "mood" like if the room is dark, use that to your advantage.
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January 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I alwats love your work
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October 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was great
you should continue with that nudist camping thing
you should continue with that nudist camping thing
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October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
READ IT
LOVED IT
will there be a sequel?
i gave it a 5
LOVED IT
will there be a sequel?
i gave it a 5
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September 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I liked this one.
Too bad I'm not good at reviews.
Too bad I'm not good at reviews.
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September 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good job
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August 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG OMG OMG...this is the best story ive ever read in the rugrats section. You finally made it sound as mature as All Grown Up should have. Good job! Keep Going!
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June 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
not too bad, keep it up