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Seriously, this is- just - that - damn - good!!! I love it, love the show, love the story, love you!! Come on, you're a girl multi task more and soon!!

Aw man... :'(

Well, I understand. I do hope you start up on this again when you're finished with your main story.

I'll keep checking back until you do, hehe.

Allo! ^_~ I was pointed out to this story by Serpent King on the KP Slash Haven Forum Boards, and I decided to review for ya'. Your story has some great potential, and even though the characters are a bit off in mood and dialogue, overall, I really liked the idea that Shego is a bit more take charge and Kim's a little more... in denial. I didn't like the weird 'Bonnie hates Kim because she secretly loves her' thing. It feels rushed and dragged ch.2 down a lot by making us focus on Bonnie and Kim. Also... even though there are people whose emotions really switch around like Shego's did in the bedroom scene, I think there should have been more set up. Shego seems a bit bi-polar in the story. I don't know if that's what you're going for or what, but I'd like to see more build up of emotions.
The cussing is a bit much, especially when it's sort of unneccessary. I can't picture Kim cussing unless she's absurdly uncomfortable or stressed, which is reasonable for the situations with Shego, but... I don't know. It sort of draws me out picturing Kim Possible and then picturing her cussing. I can't hear it, in my head. Ch. 2 was mostly set up, so it seemed a little weak in comparison to ch. 1, but ch. 1 was almost too dark and intense for me, so I'm glad you're moving away from that slightly. It made me nervous. =/
In Ch. 3 you accidentally change tenses in a lot of the paragraphs. Watch out for that. Also, things are a bit more choppy in 3, it seems sort of rushed. *I don't know if it was or not, it just seems that way* Anyhoo, though. I love how Shego comes to the conclusion that Kim likes to be spoiled. Who wouldn't?? XD So, yeah. The relationship seems salvagable!! It really does!!! I look forward to your next update if you decide to continue the story, and I hope that my review helps out a little bit. Thanks for taking the time to read my review! I look forward to seeing how the rest of the story goes. ^_^

Yes yes please keep going with this story. It's really good please please keep going. Please don't make me beg it not a pretty thing.

I loved the last two chapters of your story. The first chapter was good, but like all first chapters it takes some getting use to the universe the author writes in. I mean all fanfic are AU stories and I love it. You have to keep writting this. Altho being a Fuffy fan myself I understand the willingness to continue with that story. Which by the way I so have to go check out those stories now. Keep up the good work.
***jumps up and down at the prospect of more fanfic***

Love it of course! SQUEE! Thankyou for updating so quickly. I was not expecting an update so soon at all. A very pleasant suprise.

What more can I say? Fantastic work, keep it up. This makes me so happy. Physically realistic and well written NC-17 femeslash is so hard to find. :')

Great story I also like how you have Bonnie liking Kim too. I can't wait to read the next chapter.

Shego seemed a little desperate in convincing Kim that she loved her. Kim seemed to be trying to convince herself as well as Shego that it wouldn't work.

That henchman thing was just... urg! Drakken would have been a better choice.

This piece of work is sure brillance and i cant wait for hte next chapter truly magnificent keep it up. Talk to you soon....or reading your stuff rather. whatever...good day...

nice and sexy