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June 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It needs some work, you should use preasent tense it would make the story sound better. Please make another chapter! I really liked the first chapter please please please please please please(x100) MAKE ANOTHER CHAPTER!
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June 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Can you please please please review?
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May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You should continue. Even if it was a one-shot. You should deffinetly make a 2nd chapter.
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May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
not bad....interesting...just used to long ass stuff though XD
continue please!
continue please!
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May 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
you have a good idea I think it would be great if you strechted it out
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May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great story, absolutly loved it. At 1st i thought she would be good with matt(read about it in book). But now her and Phobos make a great couple. I hope you continue, I really hope. i'll keep looking for it.
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May 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow that was pretty good, apart from the spelling mistakes and such...but eh i have my flaws as well lol
keep it up ^^
~Arti.
keep it up ^^
~Arti.
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May 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You should really continue!!!!! Please!!!!!!!!!!!! It's a really good story. Once again please continue ( makes puppy-dog eyes).
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May 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You wanna know what I think??
I think it's really good! :)
Update soon, please..
Please.
^.~
I think it's really good! :)
Update soon, please..
Please.
^.~
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May 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is definitely an interesting story. The grammer and spelling errors made it hard to read and follow but overall it was pretty good. I'm glad that someone is finally writing a story about this series. If you continue to write fanfics, which I hope you do, you should consider getting a beta to proofread for you.