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person Febrile
schedule July 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Aww. As if a rape victim would feel anything positive towards her captor. Poor Katara. You write well enough, though. Just two questions: 1) If she was a powerful waterbender already, why didn't she use her powers to escape, or at the very least hinder Zuk-head? No water nearby? Magical restraints? 2) Just a nitpick, but since Avatar is based more on a Chinese mythos, calling Zuko's pants 'hakama' just doesn't seem right.
person layla
schedule July 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
nicely dont. the only construcitve criticism i have is that you wrote very descriptively through the entire chapter except the very end. almost as if you were in a hurry to finish it. next chapter, continue to elaborate on details the whole way through. update soon!
person ShawdiABalla
schedule June 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
keep going tis good
person Megan Consoer
schedule June 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
person Golden
schedule June 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oooh, love it. Devilishy good. And I did enjoy the perversions of your mind, very much so... ::Grins::
person Anon
schedule June 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
katara is a WATERBENDER not an airbender!!!
But other than that you wrote a great piece of fiction and maybe you'll write a sequel (hint, hint).
person Sinful
schedule June 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was good...i love Katara and Zuko fic's.. this was good and i also got a little...ah never mind about that all you need to know was that you are a good writer.
schedule May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was a great story. I loved it.
person Wrath
schedule May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I give it a FUCKIN TEN!!! Good job. Write more. Please. I'll be your best friend. Heh heh Anyway, good fuckin job.
person Scammy
schedule May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is really good!!! I really wat 2 read more!! If u could plz write more!! I wanna know wat's gonna happen next!!! well that's pretty much all I had 2 say!!!! Anywho, great story! bye now!!!