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this was a very great story are there gonna be more with G3?

is it weird that i like this?

After seeing the new "My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic" opening episodes I just had to look up the stories here. Though you use characters I don't know and who are based on the old series I still got a great sense of Twinkle Twirl's personality: I loved how she was generous to the point where she can't dress nicely enough for the Friendship Ball herself. At that point I felt some glee that her wish was answered. The fact that it was a loving pegasus stud who did his best to give her a wonderful evening, even a very pleasant first sexual experience. That was described pretty well without being overly technical or graphic, which to me at least is better when dealing with animals: stopping to describe the differences in anatomy and all would take away from the gentle and romantic nature of the whole story itself.

Now, I couldn't help but laugh at the line "Heavenly..." Twinkle almost purred, except that ponies don't purr. Whether intentional or not, it seemed like a bit of humor, and I have to admit to using similar snark in a few of my stories too. Either way it made me laugh, but it also described the sound and, more importantly, her feelings at the moment too. So it's a nice job there, just as Star Catcher himself was doing too.

Another thing that gave me a chuckle, if only due to my cynicism, was how Star Catcher and a few of his friends met some fillies that night, ended up making love, and then took off first thing in the morning with a promise to see them again. In any other context it would sound like a one-night stand, but it's rather sweet here.

I'm not going to pick on a few spelling and grammar issues, mainly because they were slight but also because the story was from five years ago. (I do hope that you stop in to see this review though. :)) Also, because of you I found out what withers are. :)

this was excellent. keep up the good work and writing.

Very well written! I never thought I would ever find an R rated version of this show! You made my day! 'Twinkle almost purred, except that ponies don't purr.' That part made me laugh! 'Like most of the ponies, she had messed around with the girls...' I always knew them ponies were lil pervs!

This has to be one of the better stories to be found in this site. You managed to add adult actions without losing the spirit of the series. I rarly leave reviews unless I feel there is a need to express something. This case, I wish say you did very good.

This was so addorable, My Little Pony was my favorite cartoon when I was little and I still love it...Great work.

I give you credit, Starwolf, you have major balls to the wall writing an erotic MLP story. For those who are upset that she wrote it, this is an ADULT site. If a child comes here, they are breaking the rules and that isn't Starwolf's problem.

That all being said, this story cracked me up. Some pretty good writing skills in use here. Good sex scene too. But reading about someone named "Twinkle Twirl" being in the throes of passion was absolutely awesome. You deserve five stars just for writing and posting it. You deserve more because the writing itself wasn't bad at all.

Its ok but I want to know who writes stories like
My Little Pony" on and adult website no offence but its scary to know you are 18 or over so just how old are you lol.

Its good otherwise!
sincerely,joxbox

You must be crazy! :D Where on Earth did you get an idea to write an erotic story about My Little Pony? Nevertheless, this story was fine and different. It really makes people react, it doesn't leave anyone cold.