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January 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Rather interesting - good character replication (however brief), enjoyable conflict. Would have liked to have read more. Continue, please.
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November 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is a good story in all but I in my own opinion would never think that Jade would react that way near the end of the story and Paco would do this. Some grammar in your story has flaws in it so I would consider revising it again and this isn’t really a lemon as nothing really that "Naughty" happens in the story that doesn’t make it seem to be a lemon. So next time my advice for you is to try to stay in more character, revise your work, and adds more "Naughty" things. And please dont flame me on this
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August 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Cute!
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August 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay, this is more of an "R" rated story, for the nudity, such as it is, but otherwise, very cute. They were very in character, and truth be told, one could see one or the other of them secretly wondering what it would be like to see the other without their clothes on. Any chance of a continuation of some sort or another?
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June 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Have a chapter of Jade and Paco gettin' it on... >.>
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April 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Interesting . . . Continue please
Thanks For Reading
Thanks For Reading
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April 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OMG that was awsome. i really got a laugh out of thta one. nice job.
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September 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
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August 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
A lemon's plot with no sex. Isn't that kinda like a milkshake without the milk? I could take the lack of sex if there was a story or something, but that's absent too. And why is this rated NC-17? This isn't even "R", it's barely PG-13. The only remotely "R" rated thing is the phrase "hard-on" but I don't think that's enough to thi this NC-17. Post this at FF.Net, it might getteetter responses there, but it doesn't belong here. Too bad too, there aren't enough fics starring Jade around here.
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July 18, 2003 at 12:00 AM
rofl! that's not what I expected at all! I was thinking of lemon... but hey, your way works too! hehe... undies!! ^_^