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by englishwitch2003

person felix teh cat
schedule April 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i just thought you should know how much i enjoyed this... i thought your writing was amazing and i loved the situations she was put in, esp. walking around the neighborhood naked :)
person Dark
schedule April 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE MAKE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!it got me horny........quit laughing at me!!!!!!!!!!!!
person Ficcy
schedule April 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The story itself is pretty much flawless, but your paragraphs are way too long. Keep in mind that a paragraph is a single thought, not several similar thoughts mashed together.
person some dude
schedule March 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a really great story...making Violet a total nyphomaniac was a great decision.
I dont like the fact that you had to end it after four chapters...please make a sequal to this or at least continue this story...I want to read more
person Hiei81
schedule March 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I realy liked it! Nice job.
person sarah h
schedule March 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
If a girl ever orgasmed as violently as you make Violet orgasm I'd say she had brain damage. You've got her nearly having seizures every single time.
person Maniac Polar Bear
schedule March 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Honestly, what? I mean I've seen explorations of a characters sexuallity, but your Violet is just horny. Like Debbie does Dallas horney. Beneath a your veneer of sophistication, this is really just PWP with a P. If you plan on continueing this (and I'm not sure how you possibly could), please throw some actuall thought behind all the fucking. Seriously, she oinks her brother, and theres, like, an inch of regret? Jesus titty fucking Christ
person ...
schedule March 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very nice, i myself didn't really like the second chapter, but you saved it when you said that Vi didn't like it. Nice fic...TOMMY!!! ^_^
person Anon
schedule February 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I never thought about THAT stretching power, when I told you too make her spy on her parents. Very well done, even if the adult scene was a little bit short. Violet is really a nasty girl, isn't she?
person Jess
schedule February 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think you should make another shower seen where violet goes to tommy in the shower and he fianlly sees her.