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January 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Fine. Here's a review.
Your grammar sucks. Your spelling sucks. Your dialogue sucks. Talking about the dick size is amateur and irrelevant.
Your grammar sucks. Your spelling sucks. Your dialogue sucks. Talking about the dick size is amateur and irrelevant.
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January 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
3 things: She should mention that he's big for his age or something. I mean 6 inch is fine with me but she should've and would've said something. Also if you do a zack and cody fic eventually make them big too.(no reason really) Lastly nice fic please continue.
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January 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i loved this story...i love all of your stories keep writing
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December 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
An excellent start to what hope to be a long running series. I love how you used the fact they are supers to explain some things like Dash getting hard-ons so young. What will happen if their parents find out what the've done? Will they do it again? What if other people found out? I can't wait to see a chapter 2.
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December 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please continue,just to tell you,I'm a Violet/Mr.Incredible fan myself. Just to tell you. :3