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for Family Secrets

by Lumpkin

person Anon
schedule March 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
C'mon, keep going. Let's get the whole family in there. Do one-on-one matchups for each, and then get everyone all together.

...But we can probably leave Jack-Jack out of it, 'k?
person anonymous
schedule November 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
:D 5/5 10/10
person Encantador
schedule November 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It was pretty good. I liked the way she went full ahead!
person KPfan
schedule November 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
"too" = adverb, as in "I got that, too."
"to" = preposition, as in "I went to the movies."

Pet peeve, but it drives me to distraction...
person damari
schedule November 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
more chapters please!
person Anon
schedule October 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I liked it.
person brian sheu
schedule July 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
make more chps...
person DarQuing
schedule June 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
More please! One shots are nice, but longer stories are better! :D
person muffinman
schedule June 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
yah dude add more great story
person ???
schedule January 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I suggest you delete that post(and this one reffering to it). Thats not true at all. I mean first of all grammar was fine and even if not it was certainly good enough for an adult fan fiction. This is both adult and fan-fiction. Both are known for being notoriously bad in every way so I think this was very well done. In my honest opinon I'd give it normally around 7 out of 10. Although considering the competition I'd give it an 8 maybe an 8.5

I won't lie and say your a great writer but you're far from bad. I happen to be a rather good critic in my opinion. I really don't like anything badly made in ANYTHING. Music, food, books. If ever accused of liking something bad its usually not true. Anyway trust me this isn't that bad ignore stuff like that. Please continue writing.