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November 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Needs more spacing. Plot was believeable, flow was good. Harsh subject. Still it was an interesting plot idea. You should really consider doing some more on this. It would help flush out the plot and give the story more depth.
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May 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
pretty good.
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January 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I agree with Soph.
If you don’t like the subject DON’T READ IT!!!
If you don’t like the subject DON’T READ IT!!!
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January 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Better than the 500 other rape stories on here.-_-;;
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September 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ok reading all the other reviews, i don't think it's fair to use that language towards this authort and insult her. After all its *her* fanfic and you read the summary, and you knew it was going to be a rape, so if your sensitive about these things then do the author a favour and don't read it then. This is Adult fanfic, for mature adults who don't just go round calling people "mother fuckers" just becuase they didn't like what they read. Don't get me wrong, I'm not saying i absolutely enjoy rape whatever, but seems to me this one is getting more flames because Jasmin is more of an inncoent cartoon character. I've read lots of rapes here, doesn't seem to get the same response.
But yeah i think the author deserves some credit here, you wrote it well, theres still room for improvment, but still you captured Jasmins emotions well.
But yeah i think the author deserves some credit here, you wrote it well, theres still room for improvment, but still you captured Jasmins emotions well.
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December 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Err....ouch. That sounded painful.
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November 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
More more more!
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March 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow...that was *really* bad...
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February 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
how sad it makes me cry
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January 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Intresting use of language...wouldn't her tiger rip the dick to pieces if he was there?
"and for unknown reasons, she began to sob, "
unknown reasons? She's being raped/molested!
work on this.
"and for unknown reasons, she began to sob, "
unknown reasons? She's being raped/molested!
work on this.