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Ack! I have a lot to catch up on. Love how Dante is doing science~. The Scream and Jag relationship is good Soap Opera drama, (I mean that in a good way.) I kinda got lost with the humans though, I need to reread it and get who's who. XD

Interesting idea that mechs turn into what their originals have turned into. You metioned that Skywarps already with a human or bonded won't change into Cyclonus? Same for Hotrods and Megatrons I assume?

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First thing I must say, I loved this chapter. You always seem to answer my questions in the best, most unexpected ways. The day before you posted this chapter, I had just been thinking about this fic on my way home from work (that’s why I have so many questions, I just think about it at random times…) So I was really excited when I read it.
Forgoing my usual format, I’m going to start with the segment about Opie Jag and Cyclonus, because Jag is my favorite and I absolutely loved it the most of this entire chapter. Even though thinking on it now, Jag really doesn’t mind it when he knows about infidelity beforehand, I totally didn’t realize it until you said it. Couldn’t help but notice that unlike the deal he had with Scream way back when, Jag demanded that Opie’s cord remained just for him (and Scream) while his ports were free game. Spark sex is done via aft ports, so does that mean that other mechs have virtually free reign to Opie’s aft? Or did he just not realize that when he said it? Speaking of that incident with Scream, didn’t Jag and Scream accidentally have spark sex with Travis’s “sons” and therefore claimed them as (reluctant) mates? What ever happened with that? Though I can see the entire situation changing because of not only the circumstances that occurred in but the simple fact that Jag is much more… sexually relaxed than he was before. Speaking of which, what exactly is going on with Scream? I know he was stuck between two sets of mates, but now that Charge is not around (how long will it be before they notice that he and Doc are missing?) will he take the opportunity to consummate his new/old relationship? Makes me wonder, now that Bond is strong again, will TC want him back? The mech was heads over pedes and then he’s pushing bond away (because of the glitched programming) but now that Bond is even stronger (mentally and emotionally) and more dedicated to his chosen mech than before, will he want him back, or has TC found a new lover. I’m starting to see a trend here in certain clone types. Scream and TC have been in a lot of relationships compared to the other clones haven’t they? Or maybe it’s just that main characters are elaborated on more. It was a nice surprise to see a Cyclonus dedicate himself to an Optimus clone. Totally wasn’t expecting that since most people think of Galvatron when they think Cyclonus. It makes one wonder how different would the mechs have been if Cyclonus had dedicated himself to Prime? Will there be an Optimus clone also captured with Doc and Charge for Cyclonus? As for the subject of marriage, now that I’ve thought about it, I think the first couple to be married should be Torie and Storm, actually. Their relationship seems to be the most stable and I feel like they would get married because they wanted to be together and not as a way to keep the relationship from falling apart or anything like that. That makes me wonder about the number of woman and eve sparks, compared to the number of men and sparked clones. It would suck if… Daniel and Speed (first two thought of) wanted to get married and couldn’t because of the lack of women/ eve sparks.
Now speaking of certain kidnapped clones, will what happen to Doc and Charge? Will the experience help Charge understand Opie more? Will he be less inclined to be quite an so intolerant towards Opie? How will this change Doc? Actually I wouldn’t be surprised if Doc came out of this in a better mental condition than Charge, but I also wouldn’t be surprise to be if this was just the thing Charge needed to become the strong loving wonderful leader we all know he can be? I also wanted to know what will happen with our new crew of humans. How well will they adjust to the unit? Will their clones be updated with pleasure programming (as that seems to be the trend to ensure that clones can enjoy sex as much as anyone else)? Will there be controversy over the newly remade religion? Here’s another question, are any of our new military band related to any of the survivors from the Unit. (I can just picture Mike finding his niece or someone there…) And since you mentioned the band infected clones, do you mind terribly if I tried something? I hope not, so I’m going to try it (I wanted to pm you first but that just didn’t happen) also, I kind of wonder what happens when one band of infected clones meets another, do they ignore each other, band together (now that they have a common goal under Tron) or do they ignore each other? Did Sharon ever find a cure for infected ones (other than an already made spark, because just how many of those will they have on hand?) Do they even have any leads? Actually, which decepticon created the virus anyway? Despite the fact that Swindle got the constructicons to create the clones, I don’t think either of them created the original Trojan and Starscream got Soundwave to help him modify it, so who truly created it? (Just pure nosiness on my part) Are there any decepticon sparks who just hang around watching like some of the autobot sparks do? Can the free sparks communicate with each other or just with Opie? Are there any free sparks that just watch the infected ones? Just wondering… I’m going to get to writing and hopefully, my review is helpful again.

loved this chapter,i can not wait to see how Charge will escape and what will happen to the clone Bumblebee, by chance they will meet with Tron?
Thank you for including my favorite character in this chapter ^ ^
please, update soon

If this is your first attempt at writing a FF - you're gonna be a heck of a writer!

My guess is Frenzy.

I did like how you went into the actuall health effects of long-term exposure to volcanic ash. Having once lived near an area with an active volcano, I remember these effects fairly well. Though the eruption ended quickly and the air cleared out before people died. Yellowstone's eruption would/will (remember it WILL happen in real life - we just don't know when) produce many deaths due to the silicates getting deep into lungs. They've found a whole fossil bed in one of the north western states where every animal's bones showed evidence of long-term ash exposure resulting in death. And it was caused by a previous super volcano eruption.

I stayed away from that topic, though its the reason why my Unit human members didn't go out without their off-world survival suits on for the first year. And also why they were kept primarily in the trailers - where the ventilation systems could be designed to filter out the ash.

Very good beginning! Can't wait to see what happens to 'Cero. Perhaps in a year or more of wandering - he will hear whispered rumors of a group of humans/clones/mechs and will begin to track them? (little plug there... forgive me...)

First note of business, I haven't dropped off the planet or anything, I just had one really important goal to finish before I could review- I had to finish at least the prologue of my cassetticon side story for AoM. I felt like a horrible person otherwise, because I knew I would just put it off. (Random fact that I'm throwing in so you don't have to say he/she all the time is that I'm a girl. yay.) Sadly thats just about all I've got done on the story besides the most basic of plot outlines, but something is better than nothing right?

Now, on to things that are so much more important than my procrastination and the reasons for it, the wonder chapter of scenes you wrote for me. (I felt all special and giddy inside, btw) I'll go in order so its easier to keep track of. Wow, the compromise you worked out for the religions was amazing. I was wondering how that would go, but I completely wasn't expecting that. I like the new definition of marriage (and with the way its worded, it seems those future generations won't have the same problems we do with like gay marriage). Grammy's name is Sally???? Don't know why that surprises me so much but it does. So, what about Groove, by the way? Did Steel like comm him to tell him that they finally won Grammy over? Or will it be that Steel is having his moment with Grammy and then Groove will have his own before they all get together? How will the others in the unit react to the news? Is everyone happy? Do some think Grammy's too old or that she was forced or anything? Are Grammy and Steel waiting until their new bible is finished before telling the others of the new Cybertronian/Christian hybred religion, or have they been teaching them all along? How do the children react to their 'Sunday school', if thats the case (since I'm not sure if they still do it on Sundays...) Does the religion have a name? (Just wondering...)

I'll have to admit, I was a little (actually a lot) scared about what would happen when I realized there was another mega- excuse me galvatron model around. I could see how Glock could patiently wait to be the top clone, but I was worried about how Stun would react with a galvatron already headed to teh top. I'm glad that they were able to compromise so easily without having to have some sort of war. And now Tune has his own clone to gush over so Dante won't have to kill Tune. I did love Glock's inital hate towards his changes. Are there any later changes that happen that he notices that he hates? (Galvatron was stronger, but I believe Megatron was a better politician when he wanted to be)

I am simply dying to know, is Opie more worried about Jag's reaction or Scream's to what he did to help heal bond? At this point I simply don't know. I'm unsure where this relationship is at all. I mean, we all know Scream is almost obsessed with Opie. I know that Jag still loves Scream (don't think he will ever not be madly in love with Scream), but he feels something (not sure if its obligation, hope, or something more) for Opie. And I'm pretty sure that Opie loves Scream and feels something for Jag. I think its a little more than obligation but I'm still not quite sure what precisely it is. I feel like he doesn't want to test Jag's limits any more than he wants to make Scream jealous, but he will do what he needs to for the group. It makes me wonder, how does new Opie copes with the possibility that he might be making a mistake? What if Scream finds out about the Cyclonus thing and can't forgive it? What if Jag mentions how (atleast twice) Opie hasn't been faithful to his vow of only Jag and Scream. (It might have been more but I remember those off the top of my head...) Then again, if Jag was there, and actively involved, could it have been considered breaking his promise? I want to know Jag' point of view, it seems like he's putting himself in the same situation again, only twice as bad. Now both of the people he care for have to interface with others for the good of the group. How does Jag deal? How is he dealing with the fact that Scream barely acknowledges his existance anymore? I know Charge isn't directly in his face about all the chaos thats been going on, but has the esteemed leader been trying to get a rise out of Jag for his involvement in the situation?

And now its Charge's turn. Does Charge realize that what he's doing is harming the people around him and could break their trust in him? If Steel, Clipper and Storm had come to him earlier (before Charge knew about Opie maybe?) would it have made a difference in his attitude, or would he have always try to lock away half of his programming and be a perfect Optimus model? It seems to me that Charge has become even worse since Scream delivered. How much of this is confliction between his decepticon and autobot side, and how much of it is possession over Scream, how much of it is love for Scream, and how much of it is fear of change? Charge got used to it being the three of them, and I suppose I don't believe that Opie is the only reason he is reluctant to let that go...

Speaking of the three, yay Doc! I love him, honestly. I do wonder if sometimes he and Jag meet up for their own support group of sensible mechs with crazy mates (occasionally joined by Steel when Groove feels particularly adventurous or crazy). Doc is the most understanding clone ever, Charge better keep him happy. He will get snatched up in a heartbeat. Actually, thats an interesting idea- tired of Charge's bs, he begins to spend time with other mechs (or a particular mech). It's evil to torture Charge that way,but it would be interesting to see his reaction and see if that could be used to show Charge exactly how ridiculous he's being (because Doc will stick with you through anything. It's got to be bad for him to refuse.

More humans! I admit much excitement at another band of humans wondering around with their clones. I feel like only military/really healthy strong active ppl survived. Sucks because I would have died with how absolutely unhealthy I am. Anyway, I digress. this was the cutest (oneshot i guess I'll call it for the moment) in this whole chapter to me.In that short time, you manage to give a nice overview of just about all the new guys and their personalities (and point out the great human ironies 'you're my brother, but you're still property of the now nonexistant government) When clones rule the world (with humans occasional help) will they find a way to fix stuff like that? Just wondering... You also managed to toss in the absolute sweetest, most adorable first time scene i've ever read. (And tossed in a cassesticlone that I really wanted to see)I will not mind if we see these guys again (though I am content if you leave them out for a while and would rather work with the multitude of well developed characters and storylines you already have... speaking of which, we havent heard from Stoner Jane (i think it was... i don't actually remember and I'm too lazy to go back and look it up!) and Percy. How well did that work out? What about Inferno and Muffin? Are those relationships going well? (here I go thinking about characters that we all forgot like 7 chapters ago...)There are more, but I don't want to overwhelm you with thoughts about what happened to other characters...

Now, please laugh at me but I had a sense of geography for exactly one hour and it took a full week of studying to get it. I believe that was a hint that our merry band of heros (i just like calling them that) are across the Mississippi and Tron said anyone that brings Scream's head and spark is back in. (or the sparks of the traitor slaves now that I think about it...) In that case, they were working on a cure for the virus, did Sharon ever figure anything out? We know from Jamie that if a Spark is transfered over to an infected shell the infection is cured (atleast I believe so, thats another follow up story that could happen because we never really know what happens after he's given to Jester...) But they can't just create Sparks from midair, and I doubt there is a way to use a clone body to make a spark, transfer it and reuse the clone shell to make a new spark (besides that seems a bit too cruel to me, to be uprooted from your body to cure a disease, but are there any new breakthroughs onthat end? Will that be the ablility of a new evespark? Wait, if Opie is the living Matrix for the clones, then what are Scream and Poet? Are they the Allspark? Is one the allspark and the other something else? If that's the case, then wasn't the Allspark supposed to be Primus's spark (that could be complete fanon or even something i just made up but I though I heard/saw that floating around somewhere), and if so, what represents Unicron's spark? would it be Tron in his mastery over the virus (he's not a raving beast only following orders like the others....

I hope the length of this review (or reviews) and prologue for casseticlone fic (i'm using that term from now on) helps make up for the hellish wait I gave you. Terribly sorry about that, I'll try to keep it from ever happening again!

Sorry its been over a week since I was able to review (I hadn't had internet), so its been a while since I read teh chapter so it wont' be as detailed a review. Despite this, I really really really loved it. I didn't realize that my rambles actually had anything useful in them, but since they do I will continue to review. In terms of surprises, not only was a Cyclonus clone a surprise, but Opie facing him had me nearly dying in shock. Best way to convince Cyclonus. Truly. That, however, leads me to one specific question. The reason why Bond reacted so strongly to the change (as did Glock) was because he wasn't that close to any of the humans right? Because all the Skywarps weren't effected, and I'm assuming that all the Megatron's aren't as well. Does that mean that all the infected Skywarps prowling around are now infected Cyclonuses? Does that mean that Tron is now a Galvatron? Did he kill Flashback?

Speaking of the dark side of the clones, the group originally got Opie because they liberated him from Tron. Did they ever do anything like that again? It would be interesting to see how a raid like that went on from their perspective, instead of from the slave's, like how they found out there were captured clones and how they snuck up on the infected's base....

Speaking of the base, and outside, how is the whole whether situation? For example, they found a lot of humans who were surviving the horrific conditions somewhat like they did everyday life. I'm certain not all of them were able to find a shelter like our lucky first group was, they probably hid in basements until they had to move. Has that had any negative effects on the humans, like asthma or lung cancer or even just a weakened immune system? (morbid thing to think about, but I find myself wondering how healthy can a person be when they live in those conditions especially after being used to a relatively hardship free American life. Most Americans can afford food, a nice portion of them have homes, and though there is pollution, the environment gets no where near as acidic as it reached during parts of this story. People can survive a lot, but I was just wondering about it.

...wait a second, because my mind jumps around, I just thought of this. A couple of chapters ago, when Opie started injecting Samie's sperm in Torie, if she gets pregnant and has a kid, how is the custody going to work on that? (Maybe you explained it, but either I accidently skipped over it or I turned into a ditz and just didn't get it...) Will the kid just thinkt that Torie and Storm are his/her parents? Will he know that Samie is the father, even if he acts more like an uncle than a father? Will it be the five of them all taking turns acting as both the mother and father positions so that the title of whose who, wont really matter?

Also, about the last time we heard anything about the whole Grammy situation, is religion going to attract more humans and clones. In teaching Christanity to Steel and Groove she will ensure that the religion will not be forgotten, but will it catch on? What about other religions? Is that going to become a source of contention in the group, like it just to be for people (and in some cases still is?). For example, many christans believe in abstinance. The group is made up of atleast half, if not mostly pleasure clones. How well does that mesh?

Here goes my subject skipping again (I'm getting slightly better, I'm putting them into paragraphs so that its not all one giant clump of random), but how does Bond changing into a Cyclonus affect TC, I understand that he was tired of clingy!Warp, but I'm certain he was hoping that one day Skywarp would be able to recover and he could chase after him again. Since that's not going to happen, is he going to give up on having a clone? Is he going to go after that new Skywarp, Cloudhopper. Would Cloud act like Bond did when TC first started showing interest in him? How would his human, Andrea, respond?

And Charge... I have a feeling hes backing himself into a corner the more and more jealous he gets. Will he ever admit that is what it is? Will Doc get tired of the attitude and cuss him out? What caused Charge's personality shift? I would has if it was Optimus's death, but it was happening before then, if I'm correct, but maybe that sped it up. Is it because Optimus died that his processor balance is out of whack and is causing him to be more violent? Is it something else? How many others who aren't in the situation have noticed? The only ones who comment on it are in teh situation (Doc and Jag). In that case, how does Charge act infront of everyone else when they're there? How much different is it than when they aren't? Does these sort of situations only happen in private (pretty understandable considering how many people want to keep it under wraps. The only ones who don't are Opie and Charge and Charge wants there to be no situation to be in the open. (if that even made sense). Is it that the people who notice don't care (like... Rumble wouldn't care, but would he notice?) or are they trying to wait for them to settle the situation themselves (Seems like something Steel or Flame would do...)

I can't wait for another chapter, I'm sure i'll have even more to say by then. One day you might get a review thats the size of a chapter lol. Sorry again that it took so crazy long to review, I'll make sure it doesn't happen again!

Just noticed, I said that wasn't going to be a long review and it was longer than the other review.... only me. I also noticed that keke is the only casetticon clone... Lets see if I can get some actual writing skill up and try to do something about that. no promises, lol. Have fun writing your next chapter!

I've tried to review three times already and it hasn't gone through, stupid sketchy internet. One day I will be able to offer constructive critisism. Today is not that day. Today I just merely tell you how much I liked it and why. I love how Glock's changes were clear but somewhat subtle, still wonder why Opie didn't notice it though. Was Dante's... distrust merely based on the sharing that was constantly happening or was the changes part of the reason? I do love the Starscream clone vs Starscream clone challenge that happened during the Poker game but I do wonder about the total lack of attraction he has towards Jag. To have pined over the clone so long and hard, and to have wanted him (or atleast the security he provided) back when Jag first offered it, I find it a tad suspicious that he just dropped off Scream's radar, especially because of his relationship with Opie. That does make me wonder if that threesome will work out or if Opie will have to chose to just drop Jag back into single life, because at this point Opie will be the one holding that together with nothing more than will power and sex. Why aren't the clones of the dead mechs affected in anyway? Since, from what happened to Glock and Bond, major changes in the original affect the clones, and death is a pretty big change in status, why aren't the others affected? It also begs the question of how will this change affect the Glock we know and love (who didn't send off vague creeper vibes like this one does?) Will there be anymore Megatron clones with sparks? Could any of the other bots just have extra sparks lying around (like Dante did) that they could put into a Megatron clone? Would that even make a difference to Glock, when it comes to his depression over trust? The fact that Scream was the one who decided to prove his trust says a lot about how he's grown since the first saga, hell even since the beginning of this part of the series! I do love the addition of Tune. Is it sad to say that your characters are so dynamic that I totally didn't notice the lack of a Soundwave at first? Is Tune going to become Opie's replacement when it comes to the physical overtures of Dante and Glock, or will he eventually pull away from his Original's instincts and find his own personal clone to grow attach to? What would happen if Charge began to suffer the memory echoes, would he ask for help or would his pride get in his way? Or is it that crossbred clones are immune because they have different bodies and that would break the echo before it started? Since Dante and Glock have been the one to break the Autobot memory echoes, are their any Decepticons that suffer through memory echoes caused by Autobots, or are all bot's fair and able to control their desire for revenge when it comes to that? Now that my mind's on Charge (I have the attention span of a goldfish, please bear with me and the incestant questioning...) will he start to attend more poker nights to ensure that Opie doesn't get his hands on Scream? How is poor Doc dealing with Charges new protective nature? There have been hints that he thinks Charge is being downright unfair to Opie, but nothing indepth about how he feels on the situation. Is he perfectly okay with his mate being so attentive to Scream's suitors? Does he feel jealous over it? Does he just wish Charge would either demand that Scream was fully with them only or just give him up? I only just realized this cuz i've reread parts of teh story several times and I always read the previous chapter before starting a new one (strange habit i know) but I just noticed that even though most of Opie's time in spark realm was spent with Prime, Starscream did visit him as well. Does that mean that he could visit any spark that hasn't found rest within the Matrix, or only ones that have issues with him? Is that his Eve Spark ability, to visit the Spark realm, sync with, and ease dead sparks? I mean Poet's eve spark ability deals with new sparks like when he synced with Scream's baby. (I believe it was Scream... it might have been TC, i'm not sure). Scream sync's with the sparks that are there now, so it would make since if Opie synced with the sparks of the deceased. Or am I just totally taking things that weren't that big at all and totally blowing them up? Oh, and as I sit here just pondering on the series, I do wonder how everyone is reacting to Rhinox. Is he a noisy baby? Is he quiet? How different does it make things, or does it not? And speaking of random ponderings, I do wonder how Steel and Groove's attempt to be saved to become closer to Grammy is doing... Or just basic what's going on with Daniel and Speed and Shado since we haven't heard about that side of the family in forever. Now I just know this review is getting to long and has bi-passed any usefullness it might have had before (it grows by about 100 words with each new review attempt that fails. by the time you get this it'll be a novel lol), so i'll just keep collect any questions that may come up in my crazy head and save them for later reviews. I'll be really glad when you finish the next chapter! There are still people who love the story so please keep writing.

You still have me!

WOW! You made Scream fight his monsters... and for Dante... that was unexpected.
And what the slagg are you doing to Glock. He is manipulative and I'm still not sure if I we should trust him, but now I'm just sorry for him.

Wow, they've really come along way. I can't help it I have to say I love Glock too. I wish AFF had a email notification of updates.