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***Insanity Part 5***

Awww, that's so cute!! Scream is their son!!

***Guardian PT 1***
I love how you write your Skywarp! Though I'm familiar with G1 and Animated I kept seeing his personality as a blend of the both when I read it. But thats a good thing! :3 I loved the fact you made him steal to make his Master happy. I think its pretty much normal for all little kids to steal something once in their lives, not really understanding money and being "I WANT IT." ((Me, it was She-Ra balloons when I was 4ish... mom made me take them back to the manager and I was bawling my eyes out.)) I think the stealing something fits well with the childlike behavior clones start with. X3 But he didn't steal for himself, he stole for her, which is even more d'awwww!

***Insanity PT 4***
POOR SCREAM! ;-; The adding the tacks for pain is absolutely evil. ;_; *kicks 'Tron* Though 'Tron's development is interesting too. He obviously knows something is up.
I wonder if after this situation if Scream gets his processors straightened out if he would want to change his name. Its been mentioned many times how the name Scream relates to his pain and his weak nature. ;_; POOR SCREAM! ;-;

***Harmony PT 1***
I like the Husband and Wife interaction here. Its not necessary a BAD marriage, but more 'n less has become the same old same old. I'll be interested in the interaction Soundwave has with the two and if it effects the marriage for the better or the worse. Very good story so far! I like how Nicole fell asleep. D'awwww.

Review for Harmony Part 1:

I loved this! I can tell that this will be a fun little mini-plot. In a way, I sort of feel sorry for Morgan, but at the same time I pity him for being daft enough to think that a sex toy would solve all of his marital problems. Still, he had good intentions and he was willing to spend that much money to make his wife happy so he's not too bad. I especially liked when he reminisced about the "good ol' days" when he and his wife were younger and had more time for one another. I think it adds another dimension to te story that Nicole has a husband who she's not satisfied with yet you don't make him out to be a bad guy. Makes the characters more realistic.

I also love how you've made music an important and central theme in this. It's hard to properly portray music in writing because it's silent so I applaud you for taking on the challenge. I also applaud you for using Soundwave; not only is he made of awesome but he's a challenging character to worl with due to his abnormal (for humans, of course) speech patterns.

...You know what I would do if I had a Soundwave clone? I'd throw wild techno rave parties at my house. And then, right before we were about to "get it on," he'd play music by Barry White. xD Haha!

Good job! I look forward to your future chapters!

Review for The Tale of Kaon PT 2:

This capter explained a lot and made this alternate universe of yours a lot less confusing. Now that I know what's going on I'm actually very interested in this world you've created. Very cool. I think the idea of the virus is brilliant. Megsy was always a bit of a sore loser, wasn't he? xD

I like Kaon; he reminds me of a Sunstorm clone in some ways, but that's to be expected since his master is really te only person he's properly interacted with. And I love Hunter; he's awesome. Besides, any guy shorter than me, especially a bot, is okay in my book. xD

Can't wait to see the next chapter. :3

insantiy part 3. **

I like that Scream is out and about seeing what else is going on in the world, I like how he's having a bit of I don't want to say confidence exactly, but he's happy that he's being accepted even if it is just for being on loan.

Prototypes**

I love these two and there bit of bickering, makes me laugh every time. Just goes to show there, doesn't matter how much they fight they know what is important and will be ready to face it in a heart beat....eerr umm processing cycle. :P

Guardian.**

This is awesome. Maria, Skye just awesome he's too cute. Looks like Maria is going to very surprised with what he can do.

Oh god... oh god... poor Scream. I felt like I was going to be sick.

I am so glad Angie's dead.

You win, StSE. You win utterly. I will NEVER be able to write rape as agonisingly and painfully as you do.

But I'll keep on trying.

Review for Insanity Part 4:

This chapter was incredibly disturbing; in a good way, of course. I can't even imagine what it must feel like to have tacs stabbing into your privates with even the littlest amount of pressure. Honestly, while I know that this is intentionally an extreme example, I don't think I could ever truly understand the sadism fetish when their partner is not a masochist. It reminds me of young children in a way; like a four-year-old pulling thr legs off of a caterpillar because they don't register the bug as being a real living creature, or the same four-year-old calling another a name because they don't understand the concept of transference, don't understand that other people have the same emotions as them and react the same way.

I'm sad that Angie died. While she wasn't the most likeable person, she was still a tragic character. That, and no one really deserves death. Really, I think that her greatest caracter flaw was that, due to the damage from her childhood trauma, she couldn't grow up. She was very immature in a few ways which makes me wonder how she might have turned out if she had the chance to grow up.

It's not surprising that Scream's meta would be as damaged as it is. I feel terrible for chuckling while I was reading this part, but I was terribly reminded of Golem (or however his name is spelled) from Lord of the Rings, especially when he brought out the key chain. (My precious, my precious...) Still, I hope that, eventually, his time with Daniel and Sam will help to heal him.

Also, Tron is an asshole. ...That is all. xD

I was waiting for Speed to brag at some point about 'having two'. Haha. Yay, Speed is more of an equal now too. X3 Hurray!

Review for To Feel Human Part 4:

This chapter was funny to me. The idea of robots going on a camping trip is so ridiculous you can't help but smile.

It's so cute how worried Speed was for Daniel. They really are just like human kids, huh? And I'm glad that Daniel stepped up and told Speed that he was family. Funny how a near death experience can make you admit to things that would otherwise be hard to say.

Thank you so much for you encouragement! It really means a lot to me that you like my mini-plot so much, especially since it was you tat inspired me. I never would have come up with something like this if not for you and if you hadn't made this an open story I really never would have written it because I would have felt like I was just copying from someone else's idea.

I'm so glad that you find Maria and Skye interesting. At first I was going to try and add a lime scene to the end of the chapter so it would earn an adult rating, but I decided against it because it seemed like it would be out of character for Maria. And, I just might use those suggestions you made. I caould see Skye cleaning the whole apartment in order to get is master's apporval. ...And now I want to see what Maria's face looks like when Skye asks for specified dimensions. She might even faint! xD Haha!

On a side note, I might be able to write a little bit faster now. I'm finished with my final exams and I'll be going home for the holidays soon; my break should last for about a month so hopefully I'll get a couple chapters written within that time.

Again, thank you for your kind words and for starting all of this in the first place. It's been a while since I've had so much fun with a story.