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December 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Review for Prototype/Insanity Part 1:
Oh Lord... When Scream said "Fuck you nigga" I laughed so damn hard. Generally, when I read a story and find something funny, I'll chuckle quietly to myself, but for this I literally laughed out loud. I wouldn't be surprised if my neighbors heard me. xD Ha! It's nice to see Scream doing so well. Crazy ass Decepticracker. xD
Well, I'm not surprised to see Tron's reaction to the therapy. And it's fascinating how it seems that he's the only one to realize his own sentience. Honetlly, I'm surprised that Sharon hasn't said anything about the possibility of clone sentience since she would know more than anyone, I'd imagine. And if Tron can fight against his programming to the point of escaping, what else is he capable of. Perhaps he might even find a way to hack his own systems and activate his weaponry.
I really like the idea of the clones fighting for their rights. Actually, I've even considered having my own characters fight for robot-rights in future chapters, possibly, though there are way too many different ideas flowing through my head for this series. Considering this story was intended to be a smut fest, it's a lot deeper in plot than first intended. And I don't mind that one bit. (Though, my next chapter is going to be mostly nothing but smut.)
Until next time, then.
Oh Lord... When Scream said "Fuck you nigga" I laughed so damn hard. Generally, when I read a story and find something funny, I'll chuckle quietly to myself, but for this I literally laughed out loud. I wouldn't be surprised if my neighbors heard me. xD Ha! It's nice to see Scream doing so well. Crazy ass Decepticracker. xD
Well, I'm not surprised to see Tron's reaction to the therapy. And it's fascinating how it seems that he's the only one to realize his own sentience. Honetlly, I'm surprised that Sharon hasn't said anything about the possibility of clone sentience since she would know more than anyone, I'd imagine. And if Tron can fight against his programming to the point of escaping, what else is he capable of. Perhaps he might even find a way to hack his own systems and activate his weaponry.
I really like the idea of the clones fighting for their rights. Actually, I've even considered having my own characters fight for robot-rights in future chapters, possibly, though there are way too many different ideas flowing through my head for this series. Considering this story was intended to be a smut fest, it's a lot deeper in plot than first intended. And I don't mind that one bit. (Though, my next chapter is going to be mostly nothing but smut.)
Until next time, then.
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December 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Review for chapter 21, that was a really good chapter, I liked the end. can't wait to see what happens next. I wish, I could write off of your chapter that would be fun, but it wouldn't fit in with yours.
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December 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Review for Insanity Part 5:
This was so precious. Of course, I know I'm also a bit biased; I'm a sucker when it comes down to loving families. It's good to see that Scream's future is looking bright after all that trauma. Scream and Angie both suffered through life; the biggest difference between them was that people found out about Scream's trauma while it was still early enough to give him some form of help. I feel bad for Angie for never having that chance.
I can't begin to imagine what rehabilitation for Tron is going to be like. I know it will be even harder and longer than Scream's. Scream's therapy was meant to teach him that he was good and didn't deserve what happened to him; Tron's therapy will, to be blunt, teac him that he can't treat mechs the way he has and that he has no right to do so in the first place. He might be treated as more of an equal by his new master, but I can't see him changing his attitude any time soon. He was given power over the life of a mech, and once someone is given a taste of power they find themselves desiring more. And, of course, it's apporpriate that Megatron's clone is the one facing this situation.
I can't wait to see the next chapter, for this arc as well as your other one. I love all of your characters (but I love TC the most!) xD
This was so precious. Of course, I know I'm also a bit biased; I'm a sucker when it comes down to loving families. It's good to see that Scream's future is looking bright after all that trauma. Scream and Angie both suffered through life; the biggest difference between them was that people found out about Scream's trauma while it was still early enough to give him some form of help. I feel bad for Angie for never having that chance.
I can't begin to imagine what rehabilitation for Tron is going to be like. I know it will be even harder and longer than Scream's. Scream's therapy was meant to teach him that he was good and didn't deserve what happened to him; Tron's therapy will, to be blunt, teac him that he can't treat mechs the way he has and that he has no right to do so in the first place. He might be treated as more of an equal by his new master, but I can't see him changing his attitude any time soon. He was given power over the life of a mech, and once someone is given a taste of power they find themselves desiring more. And, of course, it's apporpriate that Megatron's clone is the one facing this situation.
I can't wait to see the next chapter, for this arc as well as your other one. I love all of your characters (but I love TC the most!) xD
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December 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
**Insanity part 5**
Awesome, I am glad that Scream is getting the attention he needs. It is very cool that TC has taken on his role, as father. Nice work.
Awesome, I am glad that Scream is getting the attention he needs. It is very cool that TC has taken on his role, as father. Nice work.
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December 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Review for Up, Up And Away Part 1:
This was fun! xD I love Margaret; she's the quirky kind of girl I could hang out with! I'm glad that you brought up the issue that there will be a lot of jealous people who won't be able to afford clones. I think it was kinf od unrealistic that her boss sort of just gave it to her; I understood his reasoning but it was kind of odd that he chose her out of all his employees; perhaps if he had mentioned something about noticing how hard she was working recently or something like that. Aside from that, I really enjoyed this chapter and that was the only nitpicky thing I noticed.
I'm glad that you decided to pick Thrust. A lot of people prefer the more aesthetically pleasing Seekers, myself included, so it's wonderful that you picked one of the cone-heads. But seriously, with that kind of name and the phallic shape of his head, what clone would be more perfect for the position of a pleasure droid than Thrust? Lol. I hope Thrust's self esteem doesn't get too damaged by the fact that his original owner didn't want him, especially since Margaret is so excited to have him.
I also like that she's an aspiring comic artist and how you gave the title of your arc a heroic cliche quality. It's cute. If I may be so bold, who's the comic character you named the Thrust clone after and from what series? I feel like I should know it but I can't think of it. Still, Wally is an awesome name for a clone and quite original. I have to admit, it was hard to resist the temptation of giving my clone a goofy name. If I ever decide to do another I'll probably end up naming him Archibald or Ferdinand. xD
Can't wait to see the next part.
This was fun! xD I love Margaret; she's the quirky kind of girl I could hang out with! I'm glad that you brought up the issue that there will be a lot of jealous people who won't be able to afford clones. I think it was kinf od unrealistic that her boss sort of just gave it to her; I understood his reasoning but it was kind of odd that he chose her out of all his employees; perhaps if he had mentioned something about noticing how hard she was working recently or something like that. Aside from that, I really enjoyed this chapter and that was the only nitpicky thing I noticed.
I'm glad that you decided to pick Thrust. A lot of people prefer the more aesthetically pleasing Seekers, myself included, so it's wonderful that you picked one of the cone-heads. But seriously, with that kind of name and the phallic shape of his head, what clone would be more perfect for the position of a pleasure droid than Thrust? Lol. I hope Thrust's self esteem doesn't get too damaged by the fact that his original owner didn't want him, especially since Margaret is so excited to have him.
I also like that she's an aspiring comic artist and how you gave the title of your arc a heroic cliche quality. It's cute. If I may be so bold, who's the comic character you named the Thrust clone after and from what series? I feel like I should know it but I can't think of it. Still, Wally is an awesome name for a clone and quite original. I have to admit, it was hard to resist the temptation of giving my clone a goofy name. If I ever decide to do another I'll probably end up naming him Archibald or Ferdinand. xD
Can't wait to see the next part.
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December 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
To Rockinmuffin:
Well I did have a scene planned in my head about his reasoning for giving Maggie the droid specifically, but by the time I got that far into my story I forgot it and I really wanted to get to the clone. Thank you for pointing it out to me though, I'll try and be more careful in the next chapter. (Or maybe I should fix this chapter a little bit before the next one?)
And Thrust is one of my favorites. I don't know why, he kinda just grew on me. And don't worry about his self-esteem, his ego's just gonna get bigger. And to answer your question as to which super hero he's named after, it's Wally West, aka the Flash.
Well I did have a scene planned in my head about his reasoning for giving Maggie the droid specifically, but by the time I got that far into my story I forgot it and I really wanted to get to the clone. Thank you for pointing it out to me though, I'll try and be more careful in the next chapter. (Or maybe I should fix this chapter a little bit before the next one?)
And Thrust is one of my favorites. I don't know why, he kinda just grew on me. And don't worry about his self-esteem, his ego's just gonna get bigger. And to answer your question as to which super hero he's named after, it's Wally West, aka the Flash.
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December 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awesome chapter, StarRaider, love all your detail in there. You write Soundwave so good, I like how you made him not understand that he was reading Nicoles thoughts.Very interesting can't wait to see the next part.
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December 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
**Harmony Part 1**
Wow, after reading this, I don't think I can do Soundwave justice. Don't worry, I'm still going to write something, but man, your story so far is very intriguing and I can't wait for the next part!!
**Insanity Part 4**
I am overjoyed that Angie is dead. I know that is mean to say, but that's what I think, and I hope Scream gets the help he deserves.
As for what I plan on writing, I have three ideas, two involve Autobots though, so they'll have to wait, but the one I'm working on now is certainly going to be fun! It's gonna feature my favorite conehead, Thrust!
Wow, after reading this, I don't think I can do Soundwave justice. Don't worry, I'm still going to write something, but man, your story so far is very intriguing and I can't wait for the next part!!
**Insanity Part 4**
I am overjoyed that Angie is dead. I know that is mean to say, but that's what I think, and I hope Scream gets the help he deserves.
As for what I plan on writing, I have three ideas, two involve Autobots though, so they'll have to wait, but the one I'm working on now is certainly going to be fun! It's gonna feature my favorite conehead, Thrust!
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December 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
**Insanity part 4**
Hmm. I am happy that she's gone yet, it kind of sucks she had to die. Still all the better for Scream, hopefully he can manage to pull himself back from the brink. Daniel is going to have his hands full with Tron though. This has had a good twist, I really like it.
**The Tale of Kaon PT 2**
This is getting much more interesting. I have to agree as well with a little more knowledge of what is going on it makes me more interested. Keep it up.
Hmm. I am happy that she's gone yet, it kind of sucks she had to die. Still all the better for Scream, hopefully he can manage to pull himself back from the brink. Daniel is going to have his hands full with Tron though. This has had a good twist, I really like it.
**The Tale of Kaon PT 2**
This is getting much more interesting. I have to agree as well with a little more knowledge of what is going on it makes me more interested. Keep it up.
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December 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh, that makes me feel so much better about past four. I'm glad you helped Scream... but I'm guessing Tron ain't out of the story just yet...
I don't blame Tron for what he did to Scream. He was taught that it was okay to abuse other mechs for his own pleasure, although I doubt it was a difficult thing for him to learn, being cloned from Megatron. He could have been taught to be kind and gentle if Angie had chosen to do that. I blame Angie entirely. Man I wanna take a 2 by 4 to her knees.
I don't blame Tron for what he did to Scream. He was taught that it was okay to abuse other mechs for his own pleasure, although I doubt it was a difficult thing for him to learn, being cloned from Megatron. He could have been taught to be kind and gentle if Angie had chosen to do that. I blame Angie entirely. Man I wanna take a 2 by 4 to her knees.