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Review for Prototypes/Insanity Par 3:

I laughed during the entire first scene of this, especially at TC’s over exaggerated reaction to the destruction of Macys. He should do commercials for them. (Shop at Macys: IT’S THE GREATEST STORE IN THE WORLD!) And poor Scream can’t use his favorite words anymore. I don’t really see the harm in him saying “bro” or “Cuz” but I guess Sharon is just trying to get through to his head that he shouldn’t be using any gangsta’ sort of slang. Of course, wh9ile Scream may not be black, he’s technically not really white either…

Aww, poor Scream is afraid of thunder storms. Truth be told, the really loud ones still scare the crap out of me. Wish I was still young enough to go crawl to my mom’s room without looking like a doofus. Though, I don’t think I’d have the same reaction as Scream if I heard/saw my own parents “interfacing.” xD Ha! But, on the bright side, this means that Scream has reached another breakthrough and is one step closer to total rehabilitation.

So, Tracy mistakenly called Tron a “demon,” huh? That’s probably the closest thing to the truth. Though, while Tron’s sense of his own self-worth and the worth of those around him is screwed up, that’s because of the way he was raised and he can’t be entirely faulted with that. And, really, the fact that he wants to convince clones of their sentience, though his reasons are somewhat misguided, shows that he has a sense of justice, no matter how twisted it may be.

Because you hadn’t used it up till now, I nearly forgot Tron could transform into a gun. And then I got an image of him transforming and ordering Tracy to shoot someone. xD Damn, my imagination is a twisted mistress.

I loved this chapter; so much happened in it! Scream is working to get over his fear while Tron is plotting and surviving among humans until he finds the means to accomplish whatever it is he wants. (The enslavement of the humans, perhaps?)

Until next time! xD

***Adore Thy Master 1 + 2***

Yay another animated universe! Lugnut is another I would never expect, but being the Master is a demon, I can see how he would be attractive. LOL. I like the idea of magic meets technology. Lugnut's personality is perfect for this! Oh man, I wonder what is going to happen when Megatron clone is introduced. While Beast and his master are the main focus, I'm interested in the fact there is a clone somewhere learning dark arts? *flail* I always had a magic meets machine idea of "Tech Shamans" Cuz hey, in TF;A they have Cyber Ninjas... not magicy but ninjas believe in 6th sense and what not.

***Prototypes/Insanity part 2 + 3***

Oh SHI- 'Tron is a creepy creepy bot. Nice to see this interaction though, it develops his character. This could go very bad or perhaps even good if it teaches him something positive.... I'll have to wait and seeee!

Nice to see how the Sharon, TC, and Scream's whole family workings. Still very loving though not quite normal. Scream watching sex and interfacing lesson was hot~

***Guardian Part 2 ***
Haha, I love how you have Skye baking. And how apologetic he is after he messes up! D'aw! X3 I love the unplanned accidently smex. X3

****Up, Up, and Away! Part 1****
Hahaha, I love Maggie's many failed attempts before getting a bot. I wasn't expecting Thrust! XD And I loved the comments about this name. Interesting to see how a Thrustish personality will turn out.

****Urban Shock****
DUN DUN DUN! This was awesome. :O This is the type of conspiracy/suspense I love to read. :3 My fav line was the "If any of the droids decide to get... insubordinate, I need somebody I know I can trust to deactivate them," DUN DUN DUNNNNN! :O It gave me an 'oh SHIT' moment. I had already considered the differences between military droids and the original ones. Heavier armor and weapons was something I was going to do! I never thought of a different power source though, XD I might borrow if thats okay, please? X3 I did have plans for a brief meeting with 3 military bots, to show off the difference between them and the team of randoms my main character's are.

**To Feel Human Part 5**
OH DAMN. I did not expect 'Tron to take that escape at the end. VERY GOOD! I lol'd hard at Scream's behavior. Good to see he's getting better. :3 I think its quite fitting
that the same humans that could tell one bot that they love him, could still believe that bots are still just bots, and not living. Silly silly Humans. XD

Annnnd Replies:

Rockinmuffin: Thanks! X3 Glad you like Hunter. I had to throw in a character to plot against Vishal by getting him to give into some sort of feelings for Kaon. Not only does it develop the characters, but will hopefully lead to smut sooner. *cackle* Yeah, I had to make him short. In my mind i just keep on seeing humans being taller than him. Also, I would think not all people want a lover at six foot height. X-x

StarRaider: Thanks! I hope every part gives more insight into the world. X3 There is so much more to get too! *flails*

StSE: Thank you! Hunter was supposed to be more of a background char, and he sorta... came to life more. XD Like I said to Rockinmuffin, I needed someone to push Vishal along. XD I really just wanted to focus on Vish and Kaon but so many future side characters are coming up. Oh well, hopefully all the pieces will fit together! Glad you like the virus. A comment I got from a friend was that the virus seemed Resident Evil (AKA Zombies!) for bots. Thats pretty much what I was going for, for the fourth stage of the virus. X3 Kekekeke. Luckily the two found had a bit of spark energy in them... perhaps they can be 'cured.' X3

Reply to StSE:

GIT OUT OF MY HEAD CHARLES.

Yes, I actually even wrote a little comparing it to the slave trade for my other story that will take place in modern times. >_>;;; Also the whole Sparks = Souls issue as well. Even this morning I was rewatching the TF:A Soundwave episode since... it sort of touches on the subject. LINKS for G1 that don't know: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BKr13Hg5Zxg and http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ameq0DoNg5s I love how Megatron also reacts to it. Kekekeke.

Review for Adore thy Master Parts 1 and 2:

First, I'd like to say that I'm glad you decided to submit something after all.

Hmm... Black magic and robotics; a curious blend. Honestly, I wouldn't have thought to combine elements of a supernatural with a science fiction since they usually don't tend to mix well but I think you pulled it off nicely. Both your chapters were very sensual, which, admittedly, was the original purpose of this entire story; a chance for authors to submit their Transformer fantasies.

I'm very happy with your choice of robot; I adore Lugnut and think he's awesome. That, and I'm a fan of big bots. I like how you made him so loyal and submissive; it's appropriate that even a clone of Lugnut would be designed with more loyalty than the average mech.

And the addition of a Megatron clone is very promising, indeed. I can't wait to see how all of this develops... Mwahaha. xD

***Adore Thy Master (part 1)***
Oh that is different, indeed it is just a little bit dark. Kind of interesting if she's so strong at some point she might damage him, makes me wonder if there will be Clone repair shops.LOL It will be fun to see if he can keep up with her that is for sure.

***Adore Thy Master (part 2)***

I like this, to see a section from Beast's point of view is really cool good work. Is this going to continue in this fashion?

I don't feel so sorry for Tron now. But he probably doesn't understand how easy drug addicts are to control - and that not everybody is that weak. And I have a feeling he might get attached to her.

Or not.

Who knows? These clones learn from the people they're around, and a drug addict isn't the best person to learn from.

And she might not be so nice when she needs more drugs.

Review for Prototype/Insanity Part 2:

Oh Lord… xD My roommate would absolutely HATE Scream. Every time someone who isn’t black says the ol’ N-word she gets all offended (even though she’s white) and thinks someone’s going to pop out of nowhere and shoot us all down. Haha. It still makes me laugh out loud every time I hear Scream say it, though. He’s such a mini player in the making.

Man, That Tron is one manipulative bastard; just like the real Megatron. xD Lol. Though, I honestly can’t say I wouldn’t try to do the same if I were the one enslaved. And, honestly, in that sort of situation I’d probably be just as easy to manipulate as Tracey. I’m a sucker for a sap with a sad story.

I’ve been waiting for Tron to end up dominating a person; I knew the asshole had it in him! xD I really like where this is going. Honestly, I’m excited to see what Tron does now that he’s free, see how he’s going to go about convincing people of his and other clones’ sentience.

Review for Urban Shock Chapter 1:

Wow! This was incredibly well-written and drew a good bit of information from StSE's original storyline. I must admit, I was wary at first when you mentioned bending the rules but the moment I started reading your chapter I was immediately drawn in. It really was written brilliantly and you made a lot of good points. It's only logical to think that eventually human's would use the droids for battle since they view them as non-sentient robots. And you used a lot of terms and vocabulary that made you seem very knowledgable in the subject so it's obvious that you actually researched a bit instead of simply writing on a whim. Wonderful.

I really can't think of anything else to say. I'm still in awe at how well-written this was.

**Up, Up, and Away! Part 1**

This is cute, I am sure there are many clones that will be given away like that nice idea. Good start.

**Urban Shock Chapter 1: **

Unique look on things from the inside, I do like it. Looking forward to the next part.