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Oh I can't wait for him to get his own trophies! I sure hope they'll make some for the mini-TF races! :D
Also it's pretty cute just how jealous Sam is, some might think it calculating and cold in a way, but he really only has his lover at heart and you push that to the forefront of the readers perception. Very well done!
Cya
Den

Wow...what a plot idea!
I mean seriously, with all the holoforms and tf-human stories milling about, not even to mention the holographic image inducer and the shrinking device *chuckles* one would have thought that someone already had a siliar idea...Yet nobody did!!! Amazing is all I can say here, apart from the fact that I really never expected Hook and Scrapper to be two of Megatrons more intelligent followers. Loyal? Uhm...well, apart from the fact that a gestalt team is first and foremost loyal to their gestalt...yeah I guess it could be, but I can't really see them being loyal to Megs. Sry, might be my personal opinion, but I just can't see it happening. For the way you handled Megatron. Wonderful, I especially liked the part where he petted Swindle on the helmet. Very cute indeed!
Cya
Den

Oh my gosh!
PURRRRRFECT!!! One one hand it's not very original to be calling him TC, but on the other hand...I truly think the name is just so strikingly connected to him...I wouldn't have chosen a different one either, no matter the cliché! XP
Oh and thanx a lot for the meta-terminology. Everything else I had figured, well apart from the bonding cable, the ports I was sure about, also the fact that both ports are self lubricating systems, one more so than the other, is something I find very intriguing!
Now onta the next chappy! :D Who knows the other one might just be Skywarps clone!
cya
Den

Very nice character study there. TC expecting to get beaten when he does something wrong when doing it the first time was really touching.
Primus! TC all ducktaped in white and with gloves! Oh mercy :)) So glad he ain't sunny otherwise he would've be barking mad about the mess he made out of his face, but alas, he's not so not gonna happen! :D
This line “Sit down on that stool and do not touch yourself,” she ordered.* could have soooo been taken the wrong way! *wink* wonder when we're gonna see that! Also the fact that he is extremely oversensitive remains very curious indeed. I dare to think that he was supposed to be that way huh?
That's the spirit TC, Fight For Your Life! *cheers*
Awww....cloth armor...that's like the cutest ever! Especially the hissy fit he tried to throw as she laughed. :D
And believe me, I certainly wouldn't want you to write without plot! For it is quite certainly a very good one!
Cya
Den

Heh, somehow his attitude kinda reminds me of Sunstreaker :D Though I bet that's not intentional is it?
I guess I like Sam and Daniel too, they're kind of...kind. But the best is that Speed cares for them already, which I find highly important, keeping in mind that soon, well in a few weeks anyway, he'll be free and follow his own mind only :D
Cya
Den

What is this? Someone having a hissy fit over something. So you go and post spam. who ever is doing this You need to grow up and get a life.

**Prototypes/Insanity Part 3 - 4**
Great to see Scream getting better. Yay! :3 OMG, 'Tron is learning to blend in... creepy!
Scream being comfortable with lesbians is sweet in a sexy way. keke.

**Adore Thy Master Part 3**
Awesome ending. So there may be a Blitzwing clone around that can do dark magic? INTERESTING. X3

**To Feel Human Pt 9**
Yay sparks! I love the fact they are sparkbonding and don't know it. Sharon is so loving of them. ;-;

**Market Competition part 1**
Finally Autobots! :D I love TC and Speed's interactions with them. Keekee, very funny! So I assume they released Autobots just in case? Since they know the bad programming is gone...

** Harmony Part 2**
I love the couples interactions! I hope they get back together somehow. XD Oh man Soundwave, for a moment I forgot he had 'mind powers' until his clone expressed he had them. Awesome.

**WINNER’S LUCK**
Keekeekekeke, Twin Pack? Interestttttting. Sounds like your human character is a prude, not a bad thing, just wonderin' where thats going to go. :3

**Mentors 1-4**
Man, poor Prowl! But that is a good pick for Screamer. XD TC's going to become Jester's Sunstreaker I can see. XD I loved it when Jester put on makeup. Teehee! Prowl's inhibitions are adorable. X3 He needs to slowly get over those.

**Urban Shock PT 2**
OH CRAP. That highway scene was amazing. Love how Shockwave clone recognized himself to take orders from. This should be interesting! :D

**Plum Pickings 1-2**
Awh, poor rejected droid. I find it an interesting idea how they're a status symbol now. Makes sense, since I remember when it was a big deal to own a black ipod. (WTF?) But its true for any technology, even a personal robot. LOL. I'm interesting is seeing what was the deal with Bonnie and the real Swindle.

**Runaway PT 1**
I like how people are finding ways of non-rich people having a droid. Jazz! YAY! Hopefully he doesn't have to go back where he came from....

Review for Plum Pickings Part 2:

This is starting to get interesting. This really makes me wonder what possible history Bonnie could possibly have had with Swindle. I'll admit, I'm getting curious to see where this story will go.

Also, Merry Christmas, Happy Holidays, and all that jazz!

Review for Runaway, part 1:

I don’t think the situation you use to set the story up is too dramatic; after all, like you said, there are people who go through those sorts of things and much worse. Also, it makes sense that there are bad people around when she’s in a city, most likely the slums, due to a lack of money.

Really, the issue you need to work on the most is your spelling and grammar. Even just a few careless mistakes can make a story hard to read and there are a lot of people out there who will stop reading an interesting story after so many little mistakes. Unfortunately, as charming as your story is, the entire piece is littered with careless grammar mistakes and typos. It’s expected that everyone’s submission will have a few but I’m afraid that you have more than what most people would deem bearable. I suggest getting yourself a beta reader for your future chapters if possible, as that’s the best way to take care of mistakes you may miss when rereading your work.

Rayann herself is a rather believable character; a woman who has most likely hit her mid-life crisis, has had trouble with love, and owns a pet which she treats as a child in order to fill the void in her lonely life.

By the way, I love Cleopatra. When I was a kid, I had a guinea pig named Jingles and she would go crazy and squeak loudly any time anyone rummaged near where here food was stored, too.

I’d also like to point out that a miniature clone of an Autobot that transforms into a car would not have an alt-mode that becomes a full size car; it would be smaller, most likely too small for a full-grown human to fit into and closer in size to those big jeeps that little kids drive around in.

I hope that my criticism doesn’t discourage you from writing and instead encourages you to work even harder. Just keep on writing to the best of your ability; the more you do it the better you get!

Review for Mentors Part 3:

The image of Jester and TC building a fort reminded me of my days as a child when my cousins and I would build forts in my grandparents’ basement. Sometimes your chapters make me feel so nostalgic, StSE.

You know, you can’t really blame TC for his possessiveness over Sharon. After all, he was raised and has been treated very much like a human, sharing their ideals and the such. Not to mention he has spent most of his time as Sharon’s only companion, only just recently sharing her in that way with Scream, and even then he didn’t have to share her all that much. I know I’d be jealous if I were in his position. And it’s not surprising that he would want to buy her a ring. He’s been her boyfriend for long enough it’s only natural that he would want to take another step with their relationship, as much as he possibly can anyway.

I wish I could have a picture of Jester covered in make-up, blow the image up, and paste it on my wall for all eternity. Seriously.

Oh goodness… Will Jester attempt to put on some of Sharon’s dresses when she’s not around? Or try on her bras? Oh, God, please say “yes!”

You know, I don’t think I could ever do what Sharon does. I know it’s for their best interest and their own good when she makes the new Autobot clones get used to interfacing with other clones, but there’s no way I could do it if they were screaming at me to stop. Even if they like it, it’s kind of like rape. I’d wuss out the moment they told me to stop. …And then I’d feel guilty and buy them a milkshake or something.

And poor Jag! That guy just can’t get a break.

Cute chapter, and a nice fluffy ending to finish it off.