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by Jookami

person Kyme
schedule January 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
...*melts into puddle of hot goo* ....That is just... SO HOT. I love Jazz being so dominating. And ANGRY SEX. And submissive!Prowl! ....I hope you will write more. *gives cookies*
schedule January 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh man Jazz! *snerks* Good Job!
schedule January 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
It was good with a couple exceptions. You really need to read more TF fanfic, because using terms like 'dick and cock' when referring to bonding cables - just ruined the whole mental image for me. So learn some of the technical terms for mech systems.

Other than that, I didn't see many grammatical errors. So well-written.