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July 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I am not sure if this story is completed or not but it was very nice.
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April 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
that's good to know that at least megatron failed its goal, for the time being, poor Bee.
please update soon ^ ^
(sorry my bad inglish XD)
please update soon ^ ^
(sorry my bad inglish XD)
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October 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow I haven't been on in a long time lol. Anyways, I'm loving the chapters you've managed to get up while I completely forgot that adultfanfiction even existed hehe. Please tell me you will be continuing? You can't end it there! I want to know what they called Moonchaser when he was a sparkling and also to know if there is going to be some sweet lovin' between Megs and Bee.
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March 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter. If you want to make your chapter longer try to get more description and actions in the mix. Try reading some other stories like 'Cover Me' in the transformers section in the movies archive. That story is great for descriptions and body actions. Took me a while to figure out what the italic part was for but as I read it I'm pretty sure it's a flashback :P. Anxiously awaiting your next chapter
NetherOnyx
NetherOnyx
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March 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yay! New chapter! When you update again, will Megatron actually get Bumblebee and try to bond with him? I'd love to see that! Update ASAP!
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March 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Welcome back :D This chapter was interesting. I understood the Crush in Roll Crush's name in the flashback but the Roll part is escaping me. I didn't see how rolling could be thought of when he was chargin Nori... unless he was rolling while charging. And I think the word you were trying to find was "sentient" not "sentinal". I'm dying to find out how Midnightrunner is going to explain what happened when he was questioning Moonchaser.
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November 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You could make your paragraphs like more than one-liners. So you can include some more detail other than dialogue and facial expressions. I'm getting anxious to see how this will turn out keep the chapters coming : D.
~NetherOnyx
~NetherOnyx
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November 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I wonder if Bee remembers? The last time he was in the picture he was reliving flashbacks. I like the character growth in the last 2 chapters.
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November 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ok thanks for the explanation although i gotta say to the TF:A ppl wtf Red Alert isn't a medic he or she...whatever the case may be is head of security. But what ever you want make him/her then i'll just have to take it in stride. Great chapter loved the emotional flusterations *spell check lol*
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November 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Gasp a short chapter, but now someone else knows about the chamber and Moon bonding with Bee. GASP! :O MOREEEEE!