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A foursome? Sweet! Can't wait to see that.

YAY!!! *Squeals loudly*... I love it when you update!! He he he... you have made my night as a martial artist myself I thought your sparring scenes were great had me grinning like a cheshire cat... you just gotto love Prowl's moves :D... Saw what's coming for the next chapter...'scuse me... I have to wipe up the drool... ^_^ I officially can not wait!! I would offer suggestions but well I think you do a great job so I don't want to interfere with the master at work :P

they ARE acting a bit like george and fred, but since they're my favorite twins, i have no complaints!! hurrah and i will remember the new updates day. thankies and hugs!
and good luck for RL. ^_^

oooh very nice, very nice indeed! :) I like how you've managed to fit it in to the series continuity of a sorts. Makes me sad knowing how that ended in a way, knowing what their futures really hold :(... but this is brilliant, another good chapter. Really well done. I can not wait for more! :D

All right Sunny! Way to take that jerk down a few pegs. *applauds*

That's a pretty sneaky plan Magnus. He's a great commander.

I live the story, but I just noticed something: the injury to Young Optimus' knee keeps him from transforming, which is why Prime says he can't go to the battle. But in this last chapter you have him transforming and charging through the base to lure in Mirage. Or did I just misread something (it's happened before :) )

Chapter 11's beginning confused me. Was it the knowledge that told Optimus Jazz would have trapped the Ark? I guess you probably implied this in his thoughts, but it's still confusing as in the details how he should know about the paint bombs. Did you mean as it in that Optimus had experience himself a tactical experience like this? If so, you should have mentioned it. That would connect to the other thing I would "complain" about. I miss the details in the narrative, but then it's only me because I'm used to / love overly detailed fiction.

XD I wonder how the Ark's Autobots will now think about Optimus, being a match in Prime, Jazz and Prowl's thoughts. I bet he had fun figuring this riddle out. As I said in chapter 9, I think too he's strangely apt in figuring out how others think as well as using this knowledge, and also being good in tactics/strategy. Gave me some insistent bunnies about others wanting to use his processor to override a security system / find a secret / act as a general prediction machine or where he defeats his comrades because he simply knew everything what they'd do in before.

I hope Prowl shares the picture of slaw-jacked Sentinel with Optimus. ;D

Yay!!! Go Optimus! I have been waiting for this chapter for what felt like ages lol... you do not disappoint! :) Looking forward to more... I am still thoroughly enjoying this story!! :D please keep going...things are getting more interesting ;)

The names of the sectors where the fires started made me laugh. SO HARD. XD

Nice chapter. Now to get Young Optimus and Young Prowl into a berth together.