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Is there going to be more of this one? I'm damned curious if they ever get away.

omigod! You need to continue! This is so great, I need to know what happens with Jazz and Prowl! I really love Lockdown, Prowl, and Jazz. Jazz and Prowl are meant to be, but Lockdown/Prowl is just so hott!

Please update please update please update!!!! Pleeeeeeaaaaasssssseeeee! =))))

Luckily Lockdown, but poor Ninjas. X_X;;;

Goddammit! I didn't know that. I swear I didn't know that. And since I admitted it straight to StSE last lime, and got enough of a ragging then, I just hope you'll take me seriously and believe me. Huge coincidence, huh? OOOEEEOOOEEEOOOEEE... diddly-dum...

Anyway, I rather liked this chapter too. And ironically, it's similar to an idea I HAVEN'T EVEN WRITTEN YET and is just in concept stages, so that really will look like inspiration but it's not.

But something I don't get is, why didn't Jazz and Prowl make more of an attempt to escape when they tied up Lockdown?

Read this before somewhere else~ But still like it! Poor Prowl. ;_;

Harley brought up an interesting point, as did ToonQueen, so I went searching.... Yep, this story is on Fanfiction.net http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4401014/1/Prisoner_of_Desire

But no, from this author's profile and intro to this story, I do think this is the same author. So I don't have an issue..

Of particular interest is the fact that the original publish date for this fic is on 07/16/08... Harley Quinn Hyenaholic's fic http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600045567 is on 11/01/08....

Considering that the original publish date of this fic is so many months BEFORE Harley's fic.. I highly doubt that Prisoner of Desire was 'inspired' by the other fic.. (Unless the realm of supernatural is upon us! Insert Twilight Zone theme here).. On the other hand, Harley did point out so nicely, that HER fic was eerily similar to this one.... hhhhhhmmmmmmmmmmmmm.....

This is very well-written, but there is one thing you need to change. It's confusing when you switch between characters and scenes without any break. The reader goes from reading about Optimus and the Autobots and is suddenly thrust back to Prowl's captivity in the very next paragraph. Highly confusing at first! Use something like ---- or **** in between the two to indicate the shift of place/characters...

Oh, this was so sexy... I hope there's more. I so badly want to see what Lockdown makes Jazz do to Prowl.

Maybe it's a coincidence, but this fic reminds me of 'Blind And Deaf'. Where Lockdown captures Prowl and keeps him prisoner for sex and Prowl hates every moment of it and sure as hell doesn't fall in love.