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for Loosing Bets

by ShayBoo

person Yuf
schedule May 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very nice!! Poor Blurr, it's hard enough for him to stay quiet normally, being teased like that must be unbearable... XD

Is there any chance we could see a part 2, where Longarm and Jazz really do pin him to the bed? *drool*
schedule April 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You made Blur so frickin' adorable in this. I WANT TO CORRUPT HIM. >:3 The Longarm-Shockwave/Blur pairing is always fun, and the adition of Jazz is a nice twist. I laughed out loud when Blur accidentally kicked Sentinel. Silly Sentinel Prime; whether or not you win the bet, you aren't the one getting any action. xD

Very nice. If you ever decided to right out what takes place after the meeting I'm sure everyone here would get a kick out of it.
schedule March 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Your writing has improved. A very quante little funny scene there! Keep up the good work!