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holy crap, that was good, disturbing but hot, which is what the paeople on this sight are looking for, :)

give a new chapter, cant wait to read more

i want more. ;-;

this is a very good lemon you should continue writing it mybe even make one about there adventures after they get home

why'd it just stop? I want to read more. Please

Pretty good for the first bit but I hope it gets more graphic.Oh,a few spelling errors here and there.

I'm going to try and be constructive, one thing I would say is that the sex acts would actually hurt a lot and may be traumatising to children, but that's the only constructive thing I can say, as I find the concept to be sick. Though one thing, there has been a story incredibly like this, the only difference was it was Brightheart babysitting instead. Perhaps you should try to seek out that story, and if you are going to indulge in writing this sick act, at least try to make it a bit more unique. I know that I'm an adult and it was my choice to read this far into the story, which is why I will not read any further, as I can't bear (pun intended) to see what is going to happen. I can only hope this is the only adult/child fic you would do.

dat was da hot update soon lol

Holely hell in a hand basket...seriously, its full of holes.
Personally, I never would have thought of that...or anything Care Bears in that matter.

You've peaked my curiosity and I look forward to the next chapter!
*grabs author's shirt and shakes them violently* POST MORE SOOOOOOOOOONNNNNN!!!!

I'm intrigued by the way this story os unfolding and my cupid Laos Black approves of it
*Laos grins and gives a big thumbs up*

Even so, I am looking forward to what's going to happen in the next chapter.
As your Princess, I COMMAND you to continue the story!!!