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for Totally Dykes

by Victor2K

person mangafreak
schedule November 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
aside from several grammar errors and a misunderstanding concerning sam (she has red hair) this is Ok. so do another chapter.
person Lysander
schedule August 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The Spies are already in the middle of it? Good, sound the alarm! Have the alarm tip off in the middle of the romping, nothing brakes the mood and cut into the action better than that.

Can we have a basic belly dancing class for the three Spies and the proper costumes, please? Remember, the authentic dancers wear emerald button rings. I saw the same scene in Charlies' Angels, it was impressive.

And being belly dancers worked a treat for espinage, infiltration and undercover chapters.
person n/a
schedule June 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
honestly,it was a good story,but i couldn't figure out what most of it was supposed to say. if it was a program error,then there isn't much to do about that. but if it's just bad typeing,i hope any other stories get spelling/grammar checks. and i'm sure i'm no spelling master,so i'm not trying to be mean.
person Anon
schedule January 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
finish
person Drewfus
schedule September 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Pretty interesting. Can't wait for the next chapter
person sicksickman
schedule September 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I have this odd feeling you're under the age of 13. Anyway, I like the sex part but I hated the cursing. The girls don't curse THAT much. But nevertheless, good writing.